Relaxed, But Going Places.

Relaxed, But Going Places.

A Poem by JAM


I look at you sometimes
    amazed
that you’ve had some of
    the experiences
you’ve had.
I look at you and know
    that you’re one of those
special individuals,
    one of those people who
        make an impact on life.
    My life.
I am cocky.
    I feel smug knowing that I’m    
intelligent enough to not let you walk
                     relaxed by going places
    through my life
    without me taking full advantage
                 of all the joys
Your friendship brings to me.
Be relaxed but those places you go?
    Let me follow;
        Your pace soothes my soul.

© 2010 JAM


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Author's Note

JAM
The last line/word, I originally had "sole." I wanted to get the play on words of both soul/sole, which word fits better and expresses that sentiment best in your opinion?

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I like the idea of 'sole' but the way you have it worded at the moment I don't think it'd make much sense... maybe if you shifted some words round, or found somewhere else in the poem to weave it in?

Posted 9 Years Ago



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