own little world

own little world

A Poem by Somebody you've already forgoten
"

came up w/ it at school.

"

Living in our seperate worlds

Letting in who we want

And keeping everyone else out.

Keeping our walls up just

Just to see who will dare to climb them.

Using words as weapons

And hugs as bandages for open wounds.

Talking s**t about our best friend one minute

And acting like u dont know what they mean the next

Having screaming fights with our parents

And never doing our homework

Making about behind the school,

And fallen in love with every cute guy we see.

Living in our own little worlds

I just call it being a teenager

© 2009 Somebody you've already forgoten


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This is pretty good, it has a good opening and ending. I'd recommend spelling out all the words instead of using abbreviations and shortened versions like "u" and "w/". The word "fallen" in this line: "and fallen in love w/ every cute guy we see." should be "falling". The word "seperate" in the first line should be "separate".

Sorry to be a spelling/grammar nazi, but hey, those are the only problems I found with the poem. Nice job :D

Posted 15 Years Ago


I can relate to this.. you expressed so well the emotions of school and life, being a teenager.

"just to see who will dare to climb them."

This line rocks!





Posted 15 Years Ago


Wow this reminds me so very much of my high school days and the way that my friends and I were. Good job, I loved it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


haha I loved this! you said most of them were not good latley. liar! this is utterly fantastic.

Posted 15 Years Ago


SO TRUE! LOL
Damn its like
you read my mind about
teenhood! hahaha!
but then again
i do my homework lol xD
keep it up!
an keep living teenhood!!

Posted 15 Years Ago


wow really good

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on February 11, 2009
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