The Circle

Wind blows

Streams flow

Sun glows

Trees grow

Winter snows

Roosters crow

Doors close

Friends foe

Time goes

People go

Government laws

Soldiers war

Royal vows

Servants bow

Eagles soar

Babies crawl

Lovers love

Mothers love

Conquers all

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Wind blows

Streams flow

Sun glows

Trees grow

Winter snows

Roosters crow

Doors close

Friends foe

Time goes

People go




Government laws

Soldiers war

Royal vows

Servants bow

Eagles soar

Babies crawl

Lovers love

Mothers love

Conquers all

[WritersRankings]

The cadence in this is amazing, you should record it as spoken word.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

thank you, gonna try it

[Zahra]

nicely done imagery in so few words. Great job

[Jamil Isimbabi]

thank you, i really appreciate

[Shaquana Adams]

I really like the image you create and the ending. Great poem :)

[Jamil Isimbabi]

thank you for reading ::)

[Latifa]

Lovers love
Mothers love
Conquers all
I love the ending of this great piece .

[Jamil Isimbabi]

i love the ending too. funny thing, those were the first lines i wrote

[Shirlena]

The image is poignant and sweet. I could appreciate that you started out with the functions of other sources, building up to the ending and that of course is what mommy does. Adoring piece.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

yess. and thanks

[Sami Khalil]

"Mothers love

Conquers all"
So true...:)...................

[Sami Khalil]

Very nice Jamil and well written. You are becoming a star shining...:).....................

[Jamil Isimbabi]

hahah thanks, but i'm still slowly trying to widen the subjects i write about

[Sami Khalil]

Good. You are welcome...:).......................

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts with a positive ending. I believe if mother's ran the world. They wouldn't send their kids to die in war. Thank you for sharing the entertaining poetry.
Coyote

[Jamil Isimbabi]

that's the bitter truth there. thank you too for reviewing