She Wolf

My first poem! :)

She looked back abruptly

The last time she’d see

For he was leaving

Somewhere far for her reach

 

Doubt gripped her thoughts

He blended in her breath

And coursed through her blood

Blurring her vision

 

Then, nothing meant anything

All meant him

Those days, now memories

Etched in the hearts

 

All those promises, letters

To be kept and treasured

For she knew he'd return

In a gift of ribbons with joy.

 

 ~

 

Author's Note

my first poem! leave your comments :)

Reviews

[Luke L]

Lovely piece great stuff lady :)

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

Thank you!! :)

[Clockwork]

Focusing on that sort of bond that you describe in this poem is a good place to start for a first poem. I think it is one of the strongest bonds we can know as people, and it brings out a whole new side of us. You show us the meaning of waiting and honoring a promise to a lover. That is a truly special gift to have such a quality. The last stanza in this one if my favorite.

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

Thank you so much! :)

[Clockwork]

You're welcome!

[Divya Punjabi]

awesome poem :) loved reading it.. :)

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

thank you very much! :)

[Relic]

You did a fine job on this considering it's your first effort toward poetry. The ending is filled with hope and faith. Nice writing.

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

Thank you lots! :)

[Relic]

You're welcome lots. :)

[NA]

Excellent read my friend, beautifully done :) x

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

thank you lots!!! :)

[The Mutterer]

This is really good, the imagery is effective and considering this is your first poem, kepp it up :)

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

thank you!!! yes, it is my first poem! :D :)

[Sami Khalil]

"All those promises, letters
To be kept and treasured
For she knew he’d return
In a gift of ribbons with love.:
A very good poem. I like the ending the most...:)

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

Thank you! I did my best :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Dara]

I can spot a fellow romantic a mile away! This is a beautiful poem and your first? Amazing. I look forward to reading more. Although it is written with a hint of sadness, you have managed to create a feeling of hope in this wistful tale of love.

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

Thanks a lot!! i hope to write even more! thanks for encouragement! :)

[Ankur Sharma]

nice beginning janani it was good to read .

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

Thank you very much, Ankur! :) I hope you liked it..

[Riding the Rainbow]

I really liked it!!!
You expressed her/his love for him/her..memories, pics, letters, gifts..everything reminds you about your love..especially if he/she is far away or not with you anymore..
Well done!

[Janani Sree Ganesh]

Thank you so much! your reviews mean so much to me! :)

[Riding the Rainbow]

You're welcome! You did an amazing job..