Lady Liberty Is Crying

Lady liberty sheads a tear for America

Her heart breaks when hears my stanza

She sees the country's slow digression

The poor are infected by the poision

The rich beat us down as they eat caviar

They deliver us to death by a meaningless war

Lady liberty sees the conspiracy

And she knows that it aint a theory

Cancer and AIDs. you think that there's no cure

They make too much money from the medicine to give it to the poor

But the rich can get it if they shell out the money

And we know that the poor population makes up the army

So Liberty Cries and waits for someone to wipe here tears

And heal the country from its wounds from over the years

 

Reviews

[distefano 401]

very powerful. and i have to agree.

[WritefromtheHeart]

You've got their number honey ;-) Excellent write....you speak the truth in words we should all hear. I'm so glad I found this....stupendous!!!

[shadadakiya]

wow that was awsome put chills on me great work and so true god bless you in everything you do (: hugs

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

I really like this poem because it shows how the war and the seperation of rich and poor really contridicts what the Lady Liberty stands for. You are very passionate and that is the most important thing.

"sees the countries" --- country's. You are only talking about one country.

"infected by the poision" --- poison.

"as the eat caviar" --- they.

"Lady liberty sees" --- Liberty. You are talking about Lady Liberty as a person so her name needs to be captilized.

"Cancer and AIDs you think that there's no cure" --- Try rewording this. Something like "You think that there's no cure for cancer and AIDS" or "For cancer and AIDS, you think there's no cure".

"So Liberty Cries" --- cries.

"wipe here tears" --- her.

[Str8jacket]

Again very powerful poem. I feel your message. The flow was good and there weren't that many spelling errors.

[Jennifer Pennington]

I agree. Very strongly written.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Sad, true, and beautifully penned. Thank you for sharing. Debileah