Better Man

Change starts from within.

There's nobody that I'm better than,
Safe to say I've made mistakes
Living my life as a better man,
Than I was on yesterday, and yes today, I am
I am, and I can,
I can be, A better man

Roam many roads under the moonlight,
Wild and free goin' with the breeze
Wasted time deciding whose right,
Now there's no way for you to bring, me down

Jaded, Hated, Faded and low
When you're at the bottom, There's only way to go
It might seem like, Nothings right and you can't take it
But sometimes you find light, In the darkest places
In the darkest places

No longer do I crave for that escape
If there's a will, Then there's a way
I grow stronger, Day by day I gain my strength,
Don't bother Father Time by asking him to wait, He ain't
Oh no he ain't

An unsettled rebel yells until he's out of air
Life ain't fair and he don't care
An unsettled rebel, Lost in the middle of no where

You fool, Get out of hell before the devil knows you're there

No I'm not scared,
On my own two feet I stand
Into the mirror I stare,
And I can see, A better man

I can be, 

No, I can see,
I am me, I am, 
And I can see, A better man

Reviews

[JDLacson]

yes, just as you are. I'm seeing a picture of me in here. thanks!

[JaushWilson]

My pleasure! Thanks for reading

[Nerio]

Intense and provoking, a poem that breaks through all the defenses the reader may rise and go directly to the point: can we all be a better man? A good choice for the poet is to use the musicality of the verses (no classic pentameters or any other sort of arcaic scheme) which suggest a sort of ballad or popular song (an impression that you may get also because of the repetition of the last word of some quartets). What I liked most is the free ryhme of some passages and sometimes the anaphores on the same verse: it works really good.
I've noticed something strange here: "Life ain't fair and he don't care" (shouldn't it be "DOES not"? or else is there some other reason?).
Personally I like poems which keep a more 'orthodox' format and does not bend with ballads and songs, but that does not mean I cannot appreciate a good piece of art when I find one.
Great words in a musical frame.
Thanks for sharing, pal.
Let's hope we may all be the better man ;)

[JaushWilson]

Thank you very much for the in depth review. It is highly appreciated. I'm glad you enjoyed it and considered it a good piece of art. Means a lot.