Wow, this is great! Really, don't change much, I certainly wouldn't touch it.
"My heart slowly pumps blood with the beat of sound.
Music drips through my fingertips onto the empty ground,
leaving a permanent lullaby."
Personally, my favorite stanza. I wish I were in a mood of explanation, but I really am sort of brain dead at the moment. I do know, though, that this is quality poetry. Thanks for the friend request, and please, send me read requests whenever you feel like.
Leave it just as is..I read this and wham..I at times felt me and I was amazed by your descriptive write,,Nice write,,God bless..Keep them coming..Valentine
LOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT. This is absolutely fantastic, and I'm SO glad you entered it into my contest, but I must ask which picture you think it goes with... I don't know just from reading it, but I am intrigued to know. The picture you have, I think, suits it nicely. :) Thanks again for entering this fantastic piece, and maybe you could let your friends know about the contest??
KH
Wow, this is great! Really, don't change much, I certainly wouldn't touch it.
"My heart slowly pumps blood with the beat of sound.
Music drips through my fingertips onto the empty ground,
leaving a permanent lullaby."
Personally, my favorite stanza. I wish I were in a mood of explanation, but I really am sort of brain dead at the moment. I do know, though, that this is quality poetry. Thanks for the friend request, and please, send me read requests whenever you feel like.
i love the kaleidoscope imagery. just the mention of it early on keeps it there for the rest of the poem.
its great how your picture is alice in wonderland because this poem made me think of Through the Looking Glass
I'm a woman with something to say, I live my life in spurts of joy but only short ones. I come here for kindred spirits and I am here for you.
Phenomenal Woman by Maya Angelou
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