What She Left Behind

If you called her, nobody would answer

If you texted her, nobody would read it

If you stepped at her porch, nobody would see you

If you knocked at her door, nobody would answer you

You walk inside

Scared and confused

You look around at the things she owns

Scattered notebooks, settled on the desks

Clothes and pills, tossed around the room

Syringes and lighters

Pain and sadness

Her body stretched across the floor with a knife in the wrist

You realize that these are the things she left behind

You'll always miss her voice

You'll never forget her touch

You'll struggle to exist without it

She left you behind

That is what she left behind

Author's Note

I don't write too many poems, but I like this one. I hope you do as well. Any advice or questions I'd love to hear.

Reviews

[Rana]

I like it too, it's brief but potent, simple and beautiful (in its style), sad and horrifying (in its content. Like, knowing someone well but not knowing their misery and being too late when you get to know it, how shattering is that, you sketched it perfectly). The imagery is great. I hope this is purely fiction. The last three lines are my favorite. My only advice would be, write more and more.

[Joey K]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked the poem. I try to make my poems hit hard on what I'm writing about so I'm glad I did that well. Just so that you know. All of my poems have truth to them. Whether it's exaggerated for excitement, or completely truth there is always a real experience that I base off.

[Rana]

That makes it all the more special..

[ziggythelover]

reminds me of my friend. this hit me right in the heart, nice job

[Joey K]

I'm glad you liked it!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

love this ive lost 2 people to suicide sister and close g/f tragedy struck, never the same without them.
good on you for pointing out that they do leave behind lost souls. us.
great piece of work thankyou

[Joey K]

Thank you for the review, I'm glad you liked it.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

After reading yours I immediately write a poem and mentioned you in my preface thanks

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A sad tale told in a descriptive of the car crash that was this woman's life and told in a sensitive but hurting voice. Such a death is just filled with sadness and futility.
Seventh line"
'You look around at the things she owns' I think you mean?

[Joey K]

Ah yes! You're right that's a typo. I am glad you liked my poem nonetheless

[Chris Shaw]

This is painful to read because it reminds me so much of someone I know well. She is still with us, but that is by a stroke of luck only. She could easily have gone too. Poignant reading.

Chris

[Joey K]

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!This one definitely is one of my best poems I think. I have plenty more too in my profile!

[Chris Shaw]

Then I'll take a peep because I am far more interested in poetry (which I adore) than reading stories.

C.

[Joey K]

A lot of poetry just comes naturally for me, but it's also why I've only written a couple. It's fun though, and I need to try it more!

[Chris Shaw]

Poetry is fun. You should try writing more.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The aftermath of the ultimate act of depression - in that wake - only those left behind can still feel the emotional pain - poignant and sad write my friend … :-)

[Joey K]

It's good to hear my words getting across, though poignant I still hope you liked it. Thank you Phill!

[Karen John]

Even though the poem describes what the situation is from the viewers point of view..we can feel the pain suffered by the girl who died.
So simple yet deep!

[Joey K]

Yes! I thought to myself most poetry doesn't write like that, and i don't write it often. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it though!