Endless

Endless

A Poem by J.S. Pua
"

My first post.

"

-Endless-

 

I have longed for love
But I never lack.
Perhaps an ounce of you
Way back when I was yours
Seemed enough
To show such affection
Until now--
Not lessened
And have endured-
A mark of rain’s abundance:

 

The withered leaves
Outlived the weeds around,
That I may brag for another day,
Another month,
Another year,
And though I fear,
Be it a lifetime
That I have loved,
And will always love
Until this heart speaks no more:

 

For it was dust,
Waiting for your breath...
...to have it carried.

© 2010 J.S. Pua


Author's Note

J.S. Pua
comments very much appreciated.
my first post.

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Oh, I get it now.. You have your own was of writing your poems in your own forms (Dumb me :P). I liked the lines

"Until now--
Not lessened
And have endured:
A mark of rain’s abundance"

Such flow in your words, like silk and wool. You've said this is your first post. But, is this your first poem? (I'm not bonkers, read it again :D :P) Because if this is really your first poem, I should be damned; I could never write such a nice first poem.

Kudos. Keep writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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"For it was dust,
Waiting for your breath...
...to have it carried."

And a wonderful first post it is. This is absolutly beautiful, especially the final stanza. Great work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really love the lines you chose to end this pretty poem with, they evoke such a lovely image and yearning. :)
Lovely.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This should be published in a book. I'm speechless it was so good! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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ok haha cool writing im dislecsic so it took a minute but man that was great i9 like the part when u said back wen i was urs was enough that had alot of emotion and it hurt me kinda i liked it good job :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I fully agree with Quaddeth

Posted 10 Years Ago


I found the poem very well written and an interesting read, the stagnant form of the poem got to me after a while though in terms of my attention span haha, mainly just because of the tiredness though. Thanks for the read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


"A mark of rain's abundance..." in deed, this poem is entitled so appropriately! Purely poetic!

Posted 10 Years Ago


very creative and beautiful. i really like the flow in this! great poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Surprise, surprise: I like this one too; but for a different reason than the other two. I feel that you made great use of imagery throughout the entirety of this piece. I was drawn in, held on to, and let go gently at the end of the poem. Very nice write. I look forward to you posting more.
Cheers - N.C.A.W.

Posted 10 Years Ago


First poem? Really? It is very good.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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