Insomnia

Insomnia

A Poem by J.S. Pua
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My second post.

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-Insomnia-

 

You have made it.
You’ve just made your self invincible.
The fact that you own this heart of mine
Rendered me vulnerable:
Frozen with a smile,
Dead with your goodbye,
Crazy

In a way that I almost wanted.

 

And here I am,
A soul stuck in a sleepless state,
Writing poems just to forget
What they really were about:
For longing yet again is not allowed,
‘Cause you got your eyes fixed
In an opposite direction,
That I can hardly see your face,
Your eyes,
Your smile.

 

But let me wait,
At least.
So that I
May be able to understand
Why...

Why of all the constellations to choose from
I chose the farthest:

The one--most difficult to reach,

 

Then slowly,
Just maybe,
I’ll forget the glow...

...that you possess.

 

© 2010 J.S. Pua


Author's Note

J.S. Pua
comments very much appreciated.
my second post.

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Wow! Great work my friend! I was mesmerised from beginning to end....the emotions flowed so beautifully throughout this. I felt the sadness of the loss of love....the confusion trying to come to terms with it. Some truly lovely stanza's from your pen. One awesome poem! Keep writing, don't stop!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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'Why of all the constellations to choose from I chose the farthest: The one--most difficult to reach' love these lines, your poem holds an ethereal meaning and glow that allows a beauty to spill forth and flow over the screen parallel to your words, with meaning and emotion you allow the reader to step forth through the curtain and for a few precious seconds enter your world. Admirable.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Excellent, i enjoyed it, I especialy loved how the words flowed. Good diction as well; great write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is quite good. Loved the last two verses. I feel the sense of loss everywhere here. But I also feel that the feeling of loss is already present before the act of loosing....or I could be way off

Loved it though.....very nice

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I really enjoyed reading this :] Great flow and the emotion was clear the whole way through. Good job!

-Beth

Posted 10 Years Ago


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dang this writing is hard to read ima die haha i like ur poetry though it has good wording and good scheme keep going :P

Posted 10 Years Ago


You're a wonderful poet! keep it up

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is amazing. wonderful write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very interesting way to express a love loss poem...Like the metaphoric language that you have chosen ...Keep up the good work..The style of print that you chose is difficult for me to read because of vision problems...Sunflower

Posted 10 Years Ago


Well, I'm certainly glad I chose to stalk you after you reviewed one of my poems. I can see we have a common broken heart syndrome. ;) I like the way you put words together, I like your imagery. I'll be stalking the rest of them now.

Posted 10 Years Ago


i think this is a great write.. it is very emotional, i enjoyed this!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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J.S. Pua
J.S. Pua

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