A Poem by J.S. Pua

My second post.




You have made it.
You’ve just made your self invincible.
The fact that you own this heart of mine
Rendered me vulnerable:
Frozen with a smile,
Dead with your goodbye,

In a way that I almost wanted.


And here I am,
A soul stuck in a sleepless state,
Writing poems just to forget
What they really were about:
For longing yet again is not allowed,
‘Cause you got your eyes fixed
In an opposite direction,
That I can hardly see your face,
Your eyes,
Your smile.


But let me wait,
At least.
So that I
May be able to understand

Why of all the constellations to choose from
I chose the farthest:

The one--most difficult to reach,


Then slowly,
Just maybe,
I’ll forget the glow...

...that you possess.


© 2010 J.S. Pua

Author's Note

J.S. Pua
comments very much appreciated.
my second post.

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Wow! Great work my friend! I was mesmerised from beginning to end....the emotions flowed so beautifully throughout this. I felt the sadness of the loss of love....the confusion trying to come to terms with it. Some truly lovely stanza's from your pen. One awesome poem! Keep writing, don't stop!

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


very emotional and moving!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Brilliantly beautiful. I relate to this poem in so many ways. It is an instant favorite of mine (even if I had to squint the whole time to read the font)... however, I am very pleased that I forced my eyes to focus, for the flow and diction were perfect. This is a literary piece of art. Thank you for sharing this - and I wish there were something bad I could say about it because I know these positive reviews are not the most helpful and I can usually find something to constructively criticise. Well I guess that's saying something about you. Great write.
Cheers - N.C.A.W.

Posted 10 Years Ago

I really enjoyed reading this piece... it got better and better. c: Great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago

The emotions flood my senses when I read this,

"Why of all the constellations to choose from
I chose the farthest:
The one--

Most difficult to reach"

Definitely my favorite stanza. It reminded me of something I'm currently dealing with.

This is a really great read. Wonderfully written.

Posted 10 Years Ago

I enjoyed this. Fun to read and it kept my attention. Great job. =)

Posted 10 Years Ago

oh my, this landed on a soft spot in my heart.
it is so beautiful!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Posted 10 Years Ago

Wow, i don't know.. this kind of made my heart gasp inside my chest... if you know what i mean. Just beautifully written. The last 2 stanzas are simply breath taking. Lovely lovely write.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Really enjoyed it. We always tend to want what we can't have

Posted 10 Years Ago

This was beautiful. I was completely into it all the way through and the descriptions and metaphors were used were elegant and beautiful.

Good write. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on July 11, 2010
Last Updated on July 26, 2010
Tags: love, sadness, relationships, life, breakup, quetzal


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