Castaway

Castaway

A Poem by J.S. Pua
"

My fourth post.

"

-Castaway-

 

I shared my love,
Only to be filtered by your eyes;
Like your hand takes my wrist-
Dragging me
Into a world of nothingness,
Where I must wander
As a lost breath.

 

Lonely as a firebird,
I must rise from death
And bring my ashes to you.
Because I know no other way
To reach your flame.

 

But if each night I have faded,
Greyed out of your sky dreams,
Then I should not go much further.

 

And we would be like isles,
But it would be on my shores
That you'll read this:

 

"Will you ever love me?
Will you ever love me back?"

© 2010 J.S. Pua


Author's Note

J.S. Pua
comments very much appreciated.
my fourth post.

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It is a scary enough to love and be rejected, but it is life. To be a strong in spirit is a blessing. It is scary still that the one you love sets a standard hard to reach, that it is fear and rejection that creeps in our mind and soul, but this is the essence of life to love and the omnipotent teaches us to love. Ive been on that cycle for long but I truly found love free from blame and I truly appreciate it. It brings me unuttered joy.

Keep it up, Keep on writing!
I got to learn lessons from you!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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very nice

Posted 10 Years Ago


Interesting visuals, very well written. Pretty good piece. c:

Posted 10 Years Ago




And we would be like isles,
But it would be on my shores
That you'll read this:

I Like this poem and I like that verse. I like that you use firebird instead of pheonix.
I really like the way you write and the use your words and lovely description.
So lovely :-) Keep posting please :-)


Posted 10 Years Ago


It is a scary enough to love and be rejected, but it is life. To be a strong in spirit is a blessing. It is scary still that the one you love sets a standard hard to reach, that it is fear and rejection that creeps in our mind and soul, but this is the essence of life to love and the omnipotent teaches us to love. Ive been on that cycle for long but I truly found love free from blame and I truly appreciate it. It brings me unuttered joy.

Keep it up, Keep on writing!
I got to learn lessons from you!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very beautiful piece. i loved this one. very emotional.

Posted 10 Years Ago


i agree with those acended by me....BEAUTIFUL

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is beautiful. Great job!(:

Posted 10 Years Ago


absolutely beautiful.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Beautiful, true, and heartfelt. Great!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Excellent write...

It flows very well with vivid, beautiful imagery. The word choices are perfect and it reads with a rhythmic meter.

"But if each night I have faded,
Greyed out of your sky dreams,
The I should not go much further." - Love those lines!

Great job :)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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J.S. Pua

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