time is running out,

tick tock your time is up ... let me know what you think of my poem

Time Is Running out,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

Will you ever stop,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

Time is running out,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

Don’t do drugs,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

Don’t drink you’re life away,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

you’re getting sleepy,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

The sun is going down,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

you’re going to die,

better run away,

Find a place to hide,

The end is coming,

Find a place to hide,

The end is coming,

Were all going to die,

Tick tock, Tick tock,

Good luck.

　

The end ,

BY: Jennifer little

Author's Note

well really just poped into my head ..
let me know what you think.............

Reviews

[Eleanor]

Really liked the flow of it. Good job.

[Kenneth The Poet]

What if it's closer than you think?

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its fun when you read fast and then it sort of sounds like a rap, and then you just add the beatbox: bm bm ch bm-bm bm-bm ch :D ....yeah buddy! that was one fun read! :D

[Pencrafter]

Sometimes things just pop into my head, spill out my mouth and usually end up somewhere in my lap. Your poem is refreshingly easy to read, yet carries much meaning. You might possibly change the third-from-the-last line from 'Were' to 'We're'. Or not. Nice writing.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

A great flow. I think that this would make a good song.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice use of time. The clock can have great power over us. When we want a day to end. Time moved very slow. When we need more time. Clock moved at a very fast pace. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Becky Clancy]

This sounds more like a song than a poem, I really like it (:

[Evelyn Storm]

Very good flow and a good reminder to not take life for granted.

[I LUV 1DIRECTION]

very nice! keep it up

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like this, the repetition in this makes the impact even more.