When my mind obeys bad commands

collaboration with Cassie-"a poem begins with a lump in the throat"-Robert Frost

palm on chin

eyes upraised

i stare

into blank space

and then i drift off

to nowhere nice

my mind seems numb

to some happenings of mine

hurtful things around me

pain

but my mind remains numb

yet my heart beats pain

i'm blind to decision

it’s like you took my mind

washed it

and put a command on it

put your stamp on it

saying

eyy you

be at my service

and now

my mind is lost

in the web of what you say is love

but am lost

trapped

bound

manipulated 

like a spider

that has lost both its pairs of legs to sadistic hands

i move nowhere

without you telling me so

how do i tell my mind what my heart knows

when my mind remains numb

Reviews

[Jacob Clifford]

I really like this. It has a great flow of story telling and of emotional duress.

[alifeacoustic]

It would be handy sometimes if the mind could be erased, files wiped and reset to factory settings, but think of all the fun we would miss out on.
We all listen to bad commands. For all the pain they cause, they also remind us we are human, therefore fallible.
A seamless and wonderfuljourney, through the thoughts of those ever learning minds.

[A hare off]

Hi Jesse, I reviewed this on the co-poets page earlier today but I will do the same here. What a great and seamless poem you two have written. Often it is hard to tell the mind what the heart knows, but eventually it will find out, it has no choice. The heart is a powerful organ and both need each other to exist. Great collaborative writing.

[jesserose99]

Thanks for that!! Cassie was amazing here. Really enjoyed this.