Hello me

about my personal journey into crazy

Hello me

it's me again

I get the feeling

I can't come in

it's been months now

on the outside

and I don't have a soul

to confide

Confusing as such

try my world much

the TV talks

yes to me

there are things Im sure

others just don't see

and suicide cheers

outside jeers

it would be sadder had I succeeded

lord if they knew the world that proceeded

Hello me,

its me again

I'd like help getting back outside

see I'm locked in

a place others fail to see

when they smile and look at me

Wait no, covering is getting harder

reality is getting farther

mixed in the madness is truth I know

but how do you tell them what is and ain't so

I think the truth finds me

my job isn't to make others see

Why is beauty hidden in lies

Why does my mind stay jailed while my soul flies

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Ah, very freed-y type write that has its own wings to reach beyond horizons. Happiness's everything around the world to be lived with peace, but hardly the one finds it in universe cos, everybody's already lost in their own mazes of mind, for no reason so it's good living what's meant to be lived before it's too late to: LIFE. Very deep and evocative poetry. Great job!

[jesserose99]

Thank you Adams, I am so glad you saw what you did.

[dan]

jesserose, Extremely well written, with a hint of rhythmic flow guiding the piece along logically. You keep insisting, "it's me again...." which harbors a suggestion of desperation...the brief mention of suicidal thought is sudden and powerful...this power wielding tone intensifies the poem's impact. VERY well done! take care...dan

[Ron H]

Very good poem. A thoughtful piece.

[TheMalady]

So deep. From what I have read, it tells about your inner persona trying to break out from its shell, however, people do tend to criticize about our personality that we end up being like others. Being true to yourself is indeed, difficult.

I like the words that were woven in your poem. They are very meaningful and emotional. Thanks for sharing! :)

[Akki]

I really liked it....it is so nice creation... thanks for sharing.......

[unfathomd]

That was just amazing! :D Ur "vision" stuff is really powerful! :D I cn sense "you" in ur work :D

[Blackheart]

This is gold mam. Really loved it.
"Why is beauty hidden in lies". This line is beautiful as anything. :)

[jesserose99]

I am so flattered by what you have just said...thank you for your kind words!

[David Marsden]

That's a beautiful poem, an insight into your mind. You can see what most of us can't and sometimes it seems a burden to you, I suppose it would be, but at other times a gift. You know how to put your whole heart and thoughts into writing without holding back and that's what makes it so powerful. And that last line, well, if anyone has the key,it's you.

[jesserose99]

Wise words about the last line of this poem...always the hardest to learn that you have the key all along. Thank you David!

[David Marsden]

It's a bit like "the other man's grass is always greener," we have to look at what we have not what we havn't got. These past few years I have tried to concentrate on this and it works, by calming the inner self, which brings with it happiness, but you already know this.

[jesserose99]

deep down of course...yet it always helps to hear...thank you David.

[alifeacoustic]

A beautiful and heart felt piece of writing that so many can relate to, including myself. We hide behind masks and plastic humour, while the reality, or unreality of the mind wreaks havoc inside us, judging us, agonising over every detail, yet unable to grasp the thread that started as such an innocent thought, that our mind puts through the complex part of our brain and dissects it until it is unrecognisable to what it began as.
The mind is amazing, but it is also fragile and so misunderstood.
Your words touched me Jesse. It is so hard for those thoughts to find their voice. We stumble over them until they are crushed, but you fought the valiant fight and wrote a wonderful portrayal of a terrible thought process that that the word madness evokes in us all. Call it what you like, mania, madness, no word can conjure the reality of living it.

[jesserose99]

I am so glad you liked it...and I am glad it is relatable...I was afraid it wouldn't be because well you know it is a little kooky, but I am so happy it was. Thank you for you lovely review...makes my heart smile!

[alifeacoustic]

glad to hear it. we all need those kind of smiles :)

[Woody]

great write jesse. I wish I could do the same: look inside me and question things.
introspection has never been my forte :(
now THIS is poetry!

[jesserose99]

Thanks Woody, I really appreciate your saying so, it truly means a lot as my saying so kind of put me out there in the wind...lol

[Woody]

seriously, being able to analyze oneself is a gift not given to many. and in poetry, to boot!!!!

[Lydia Shutter]

I just want to reach through the screen and give you a giant hug, Jesse. Such delicate introspection...such honesty. I am sorry you are so conflicted right now. Your poem moved me. Lydi**

[jesserose99]

Thank you Lydi...I think it is more behind then now...but i still feel that way now and again...so it just came. I appreciate your sweet words!