Beautifully Broken

Beautifully Broken

A Poem by jumbie's #1 fan
"

perfect people are not real. real people are broken.

"

Many will praise an unblemished face

A flawless woman

Not a hair out of place

She sparkles and shines

To the world, she is divine

But not to me.

 

To me, that girl is not perfection

Merely a superficial child desperate for affection

Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please?

It is my obligation to inform you of a spreading disease

The tendency to determine beauty by the least amount of flaws you see

The opposite of how I see beauty

 

A young woman down on her knees

Mascara and tears stain her cheeks

It's beautiful

The scars on her wrists and the bruises on her skin

Beautiful

The child whom rape has befallen

She searches for a hole to crawl in

Beautiful

She's got dirt underneath her fingernails

She's been beaten and torn apart to her very core

And she's not sure she can handle much more

 

Beautifully broken

Her eyes will tell you a story

Without words being spoken

Unloved

Flawed

Hurt

She's dying inside

But the most beautiful part

She's still alive

This girl is honest

This girl is true

This girl doesn't have anything to prove

 

Deem me insane for saying such a broken spirit is beautiful

But friends, I am not the only one that finds this state suitable

 

Perfection can only be found in one man

He reaches to the beautifully broken with an outstretched hand

He brushes back her hair and tells her

"Everything will be fine."

"You don't have to worry anymore because child, you are mine"

"Daughter when you are at your worst, I will be the One you'll turn to first"

"Your pain is great, but I am greater"

"Your wounds run deep, but my love for you is deeper"

"You say you are not strong, but Daughter, you are very wrong"

 

"Because you are shattered"

"Because you are hurt"

"Because nothing seems to matter"

"Because you are in pain"

"Because you are beautifully broken"

"My love for you reigns"

"Child, this is not the end."

 

"I have come to make the beautifully broken beautifully whole again"

© 2010 jumbie's #1 fan


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Everyone is beautiful in their own way. This is a very well written poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Real beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. Your description of woman being torn down to their weaken points. I hope woman can be protected and treated with respect. Rape and abuse can leave a woman destroyed and unable to get up. Need family and love to repair. A powerful poem. You made me think. A beautiful woman is a mother, grandmother, sister and daughter who is kind and gentle with people around them.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


"Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please?
It is my obligation to inform you of a spreading disease
The tendency to determine beauty by the least amount of flaws you see
The opposite of how I see beauty"

Fantastic write! The words flow great and each stanza leads into the next, seamlessly.

Great message, as well. Taking the worst from life and surviving..continuing to fight - that IS real beauty.

Bravo! I love this piece :)



Posted 10 Years Ago


I like the depth that you've invested in this. I could feel the emotion behind the words, which gave each line impact. The only point I'd make is that the delivery is a bit disjointed, with a rhyming scheme that changes from one stanza to another. Perhaps it's just in how I read it. Regardless, this is a deeply personal, moving piece. Keep it up.

Posted 10 Years Ago


very well done

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is beautiful. One of the best I have read on here, and actually very true. I'm glad not all men are superficial and like fake women.
I love that you put the element of God in it. I don't really read religious poetry, I, myself, am not religious. I get a lot of criticism for that in school, even though I believe in God. But this was very thought provoking. What is beauty?
I love how you find beauty in the flaws, though. Truly amazing poem. Positively going into my favorites.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow. This is a very strong poem. Perfectly beautiful. If I'm allowed to say that.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wonderful-a great piece of free verse-
i love how smoothly this piece reads-
and the narrative imagery is perfect-
this is magnificent-creative poem!!!

"To me, that girl is not perfection
Merely a superficial child desperate for affection
Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please?"

...great line-awesome!!!

james:-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow very wonderfull poem i like it a lot great topic, great structure, overall a very good poem

Posted 10 Years Ago



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