Beautifully Broken

perfect people are not real. real people are broken.

Many will praise an unblemished face

A flawless woman

Not a hair out of place

She sparkles and shines

To the world, she is divine

But not to me.

 

To me, that girl is not perfection

Merely a superficial child desperate for affection

Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please?

It is my obligation to inform you of a spreading disease

The tendency to determine beauty by the least amount of flaws you see

The opposite of how I see beauty

 

A young woman down on her knees

Mascara and tears stain her cheeks

Reviews

[Alicia™]

Everyone is beautiful in their own way. This is a very well written poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

Real beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. Your description of woman being torn down to their weaken points. I hope woman can be protected and treated with respect. Rape and abuse can leave a woman destroyed and unable to get up. Need family and love to repair. A powerful poem. You made me think. A beautiful woman is a mother, grandmother, sister and daughter who is kind and gentle with people around them.
Coyote

[Onyx_Rayne]

"Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please?
It is my obligation to inform you of a spreading disease
The tendency to determine beauty by the least amount of flaws you see
The opposite of how I see beauty"

Fantastic write! The words flow great and each stanza leads into the next, seamlessly.

Great message, as well. Taking the worst from life and surviving..continuing to fight - that IS real beauty.

Bravo! I love this piece :)

[Bard Constantine]

I like the depth that you've invested in this. I could feel the emotion behind the words, which gave each line impact. The only point I'd make is that the delivery is a bit disjointed, with a rhyming scheme that changes from one stanza to another. Perhaps it's just in how I read it. Regardless, this is a deeply personal, moving piece. Keep it up.

[KaySea]

very well done

[Jessica]

This is beautiful. One of the best I have read on here, and actually very true. I'm glad not all men are superficial and like fake women.
I love that you put the element of God in it. I don't really read religious poetry, I, myself, am not religious. I get a lot of criticism for that in school, even though I believe in God. But this was very thought provoking. What is beauty?
I love how you find beauty in the flaws, though. Truly amazing poem. Positively going into my favorites.

[Hamkar]

Wow. This is a very strong poem. Perfectly beautiful. If I'm allowed to say that.

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Wonderful-a great piece of free verse-
i love how smoothly this piece reads-
and the narrative imagery is perfect-
this is magnificent-creative poem!!!

"To me, that girl is not perfection
Merely a superficial child desperate for affection
Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention please?"

...great line-awesome!!!

james:-)

[jose]

Wow very wonderfull poem i like it a lot great topic, great structure, overall a very good poem