I cannot cry at the Park.

Please enjoy! Feel free to answer the questions posted in the poem. If you want they are highlighted blue! lol!

Life is tough to understand
Since I don't have many friends because I cannot afford to go out with them
I over-think and hide my feelings
My thoughts race faster than I can speak
At night, I try to hide my tears
I cry quietly so no one else can hear
I come home to say my parents complain about bills
I go up the hill to my fiancée house, to hear him complain about money
I’m engaged but we can’t afford our own place
I don’t have any idea how to afford a wedding

Why does everything have to cost so much money?
Why is a well paying job hard to find?
I just want to live comfortably
Without worrying about having somewhere to call, “Home.”
I would sell everything I have just to live with my fiancée
I’m tired of living in an one bedroom apartment with my parents and three siblings
I’m sick of working several jobs, to only have enough for one piece of fried chicken
Money makes my family struggle
Money destroys my fiancée and I
Why must money rule over everything and everyone? Part of life.
What is there to do? Nothing.
Where is there to say? Nothing.
Where is there to hide? Behind a tree, in the park.
Behind the tree, in the park, since its free, I feel fine
The park has beautiful sunsets and cute animals
At least I have once place where I don’t cry.

Reviews

[TheSweet]

Money does sometimes hinder a little too much. But not much can be done about it - money can't rule your mind so I do the best I can with what I have. Not everything costs so much money - just the finer things. But you can manage without those when you have yourself. A well paying job is hard to find because if everyone had a well paying job there would be no such thing as one, for some jobs to earn you a lot of money others have to earn minimum.

Saddening, but a nice write I think. Highlights problems a lot of people feel - especially here where people want to be writers :> Thanks for sharing.

[Ashley]

thank you very much

[Constance Payne]

Money does make life a struggle. I wish you all the luck in the world with your future. Never allow money to overrule love.

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is a very powerful piece, but may I make a suggestion? I feel like the closing line would be so much more powerful if you changed it to "where I do not cry" instead. Great write! Absolutely thrilling.

[Lily Mae]

You have stolen my heart with this.. there is such a part of me in this write. Those last lines about at least there is one place where you don't cry.. :) beautifully said.. xo

[Ashley]

thanks.