Sold My Soul

In a crowded room, I sit all alone,
With a heart stopped beating, and a face gone numb.
A pit in my stomach, that taste on my tongue,
Demons in my head, and gallows in my lungs.

Walking to get nowhere, in the pouring rain,
Blood on my hands, my senses are maimed.
Broken and tortured, all I now know is pain,
A new source of anger now kindles in flames.

A worthless lost cause, I sold my lone soul,
To the devil himself, I thought he’d make me whole.
Regret in my breath, I now take this toll,
Sentenced to Hell, my eternity proves dull.

Fallen on my knees, my shadow it screams,
To anyone who cares, to hear my last plead.
I’ll never escape, it’s my own living dream,
And it’s all your fault, now forever I’ll bleed.

I lay on my back, in the depths of the night,
Hopeless for peace, I’m allergic to light.
Now as the devils consume me, I won’t put up a fight,
I swear it’s your fault, I did everything right!

So forget every lie that you have said to me,
Forget every promise you made me for peace
And I’ll die alone, still clenching my teeth,
Tears, they won’t save me, I’m within Hell’s reach!

As I watch them come closer, I know it’s my time,
The appearance of evil, there’s nothing inside.
Stealing my soul, the way you did with mine,
It’s too late to repent, now this day I die!

Author's Note

I wrote this poem for school. It's supposed to be dark and Gothic, but it has absolutely nothing to do with my life.

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, sure it has nothing to do with your life but it really sounds like it was real and like you really did this but oh well, that's one talent you've got there (:

[C.A. Lucas]

I love this. It's so perfect! Your rhythm is constant, and your words really express the emotions, and it totally fits in the Gothic category. You are very talented.
Just some advice, to make it even better than it already is, you could perhaps bring the reader back to where they first started- when you're sitting in a crowded room. You could add some more detail and close it off then. I don't know, it just seems like that would be cool. I know most people don't really do anything that a reviewer tells them (I don't always) but it's only a suggestion.
Very well done :)

[Drifter]

I might take you up on that...I see how that would be cool, like bringing the reader back to a reality. Thank you

[lee von cleef]

A hot and heavy load of emotion,we feel the pain, stand on the same ground, well
framed .