STEAL

STEAL

A Poem by Thomas Sawyer

The glint of the ring is irresistible

The beat of  my heart tells me i want it

My eyes steady, no longer under my control

I know there is only one thing to fo

STEAL

I tell myself i don't need it

My heart tells mr to forget it

But its precious stone must grace my finger

I will do the one thing i mustn't

STEAL

I stare at the object of my lust

Its value now like a grain of sand on the beach

Sad is howi feel, pathetic is what i am

The day passes away, but one thing i know i'll do again

STEAL!

© 2011 Thomas Sawyer


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Thomas Sawyer
My first here. Bring it on.

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I can not relate because 1) I don't care for jewlery and 2) I am way too obvious when it even comes to the thought of stealing!- although I understand the feeling and desires to do so and I know that once someone does it once, they surely will do it again. So not only was your poem written well, but it tells a truth. I like it, although there were a few typos (but editing can easily fix that!); all in all it's a good write and I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Other than some editing errors, it's a very good first poem. Keep it up!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like the second stanza. I also liked how you were somewhat general throughout the poem because, although it's linked to stealing something, some of the descriptions and feelings could be linked to other feelings or struggles people face. I also like the guilt shown in the last stanza. Whenever we "misbehave" and so something we've promised ourselves we won't we're always left feeling guilty and useless. Really great poem, keep it up. (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thanks for the reviews, will edit as suggested.

Posted 12 Years Ago


i really like it, great job.

the only thing i would do is at the end where you say: but one thing i know i'll do it again'

might sound better like this: but one thing i know is i'll do it again.

Def. wanna read some more. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very unusual and interesting a poem!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I can not relate because 1) I don't care for jewlery and 2) I am way too obvious when it even comes to the thought of stealing!- although I understand the feeling and desires to do so and I know that once someone does it once, they surely will do it again. So not only was your poem written well, but it tells a truth. I like it, although there were a few typos (but editing can easily fix that!); all in all it's a good write and I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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