An Ocean's Wave

i feel the sun's warmth

hear the squall of a sea gull

and smell the ever lingering scent of kelp

the ocean swells

a kid laughs with a ball

another cries amidst mounds of sand

people are laughing

some even kissing

i dig my toes deep

to sand not yet warmed

smelling the saliferous breeze

as it chills my skin

the water peaks

i want to hold this moment

if for only a second

the wave crashes

it is gone

Author's Note

I decided to try something new out, thoughts?

Reviews

[luna11]

I love it! :D
Well done.
xx

[...]

. this is beautiful ...
. a special moment captured in poetry ...

[Archia]

I liked the description, it was pretty. The second stanza though was a bit stunted to me; almost like each line fit with the line before it instead of the whole thing. I did quite like the last part though, that was good.