The Last Of My Hope

The Last Of My Hope

A Poem by Jordyn Lee
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augh. it sucks.

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I knew my feelings for you were pure
There was nothing that could make me feel so sure
As i approached your smiling face
All in the beauty and grace
She approached you also
That one innocent move made me feel my heart fall, so
I thought it was just an ignorant game
But as the truth made me hide away in shame
I was your marionette, you tugging at my strings
Me, you, and our happy things
Life was good, all was well
My mind was ringing like a cheerful bell
But, soon enough, the strings snapped
And she clapped
in delight, and skipped away
With you, leaving me in dismay
You and her
Her and you
smiling, laughing, and away you two flew
Leaving me here in the dirt
My body all smashed and hurt
You snipped my strings without regret
Her shameful act i will not forget
I lay here, wondering what every made me fall for you
was it your charm? or your deep eyes so blue?
I cry here, in the dirt, feeling like a dope
And i think to myself, "There goes my last hope"

© 2010 Jordyn Lee


Author's Note

Jordyn Lee
Based on a real life story -.-

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Hope is neverending, wish for someone better with, no strings attached. Very nice Jordyn, I've probably sat in that same dirt at sometime myself. Stand up, brush yourself off and hold your head up high. I hope better things are around the corner.

Great job.
Antonio


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I know the feeling it hurts but you did a great job putting this piece together, getting those feeling out and moving on.
Excellent write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


There is only 1 word i can think of when finish reading this. Amazing. u really did a good job with this poem. keep going, hope to read even more poems by you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This one really moved me, i'm sure somewhere in my past I went through this. Anyway I noticed you seem to be pushing the rhyme more than is needed.

Instead, try concentrating solely on depth like in the parts that do not rhyme at all. Those resonate and move.
Nice piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


There is a difference between love and lust

Some of us see lust covered in love

Infatuation is a chocolate covered strawberry

Love is nothing but the real thing

It needs no covering


Great write

Posted 11 Years Ago


the poem is amazing!
I loved it
it's really hard to bear when someone who you love falls in love with other
it's not very odd situation but it gives us so much of pain and takes away all the hope
the poem really has a great rhyme scheme it's simple but i loved it :D
Keep up the good work
~Aaradhya

Posted 11 Years Ago


Hope is neverending, wish for someone better with, no strings attached. Very nice Jordyn, I've probably sat in that same dirt at sometime myself. Stand up, brush yourself off and hold your head up high. I hope better things are around the corner.

Great job.
Antonio


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This seriously is wonderful O_O For some reason, the idea of a marionette is pretty good for this theme. :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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