Half a Cup of Pain, Sprinkle Some Crazy

Half a Cup of Pain, Sprinkle Some Crazy

A Poem by Jordyn Lee
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title says it all. rawr. real life experience. sucks a*s. :P

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Unconditional love feels like an understatement here
Love, love i know is what i feel, but also what i fear
Addiction, addiction... deathly addicted to you
Answers, answers is what i need from you, fool
Your eyes, eyes... beautifully, miraculously sapphire
Your scent, so delicious, getting higher and higher
I already know the answer, even if you act sweet and kind
But i can't help it, you're driving me crazy... taking over my feeble mind
Her stare, her death glare, chaining me down
So stupid, so ignorant, so foolish... i feel like a clown
Tearing away my dignity, self esteem... my self pride...
Choking death painfully would arise if caught by your side
Your careless stare digging into my skin
My thick metal armor now turning into tin
This feeling is not mutual between you and I
It's sad to think that without this artificial love, i'd probably collapse and die
Answers, answers... that's all i really want
With the demon in my face, laughing as she taunts
I beg myself for this just to be a nasty dream, and soon i'll wake
But i know i must fathom cruel reality, and realize that this is all just fake

© 2010 Jordyn Lee


Author's Note

Jordyn Lee
I'm sorry for not uploading any poems in a while. D: i've been really busy.:/ i'll try to upload them more frequently i promise!:)

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i like this. good poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Ivy
I really like your poem. The emotions are clear, and I can see a conversation in my head. I like the style, and the flow. It was great.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Have you somehow gazed into my life? This is such a beautiful poem, even through the pain. Or rather, it's beauty is augmented by it. A gentle caress to a broken consciousness. And I thank you for that.

Posted 13 Years Ago


"Love, love i know is what i feel, but also what i fear
Addicton, Addiction... deathly addicted to you''
OI am in love with this. Its pure magic from beginning to end. Number four of my favorites.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I don't know. When I was surrounded by love. It was worth the possibility of sadness. No safe risk in this world. I like how made the statements about the decision of love.
"Love, love i know is what i feel, but also what i fear
Addiction, addiction... deathly addicted to you"
When we are deep entrenched in the emotion of love. Leave us open for heartache and the possibility of great pleasure. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ah what is love but an aching heart, and a pocketfull of broken promises.

And yet i loved this beautiful worded and well executed poem.

keep on doing what your doing

Posted 13 Years Ago


Not everything or every dream has a fairy taled ending.
So very descriptive in your writing, I could visualize it
so easily. Great job...

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is a really amazing poem you got here. The rhyme scheme was great and your word choices were, too. I think my favorite lines were:

"Your eyes, eyes... beautifully, miraculously sapphire
Your scent, so delicious, getting higher and higher".

Excellent job.



Posted 13 Years Ago


This is beautiful and speaks the sad, cold truth of having to deal with reality. I Truly enjoyed reading this poem. You have an amazing talent. Excellent rhyming scheme, excellent poem. Great write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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