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A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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07/2012

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                                         if I can conquer the darkness of a lifetime
                                        can I not reach beyond the stars in faith
and take a hold of the reins that guide 
all these untouchable things

                                         using my gifts within to shape a new day
                                        am I able to rebuild or is it just a waste
due to the strain of a mediocre life 
seemingly impossible to overcome 

                                                                     is that not doubt

© 2012 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
"But when he asks, he must believe and not doubt,
because he who doubts is like a wave of the sea,
blown and tossed by the wind." James 1:6

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Dear joshua deathdealer,

I like the first two lines because they are dramatic and like a paradox as they run parallel to one another. I wonder why it went downhill. How come you ended it in such frailty? It went from power to powerless, hope to doubt. Interesting, maybe you meant is that way. I read over and I ponder if the author has shaped the poem in the lines of his mind and the scripture, "being like a wave of the sea, blown and tossed by the wind." I wonder if the position of the stanza symbolize the sway.

However, this line, I do not understand, "and take a hold of the reins that guide all these untouchable things." These two I don't understand either, "using my gifts within to shape a new day/am I able to rebuild or is it just a waste." Or you know what maybe it's like a contemplation of wills. I don't know. That's my view.

Thanks for sharing!

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

Posted 8 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

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8 Years Ago

This poem is the questioning of something that I already know is possible. Therefor the sway in the .. read more



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This is brilliant. We are all, devoid of the certainties that we want. And most of our actions/decisions becomes leaps of faith. Your poem stretches the limits of doubt to as far as "beyond the stars" and as close as the "gifts within". Loved this!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I struggle with doubt myself. I believe we all do.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Ees
I love this poem. I can see nothing wrong with it. It is beautiful and understandable.
Great job!
I wouldn't mind just one question mark at the end, but that is just for you to think about.
Fantastic job,
have fun,
Erin

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think everybody can feel your poem and somehow relate to it coz it it's true to all
=]

Posted 8 Years Ago


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This was really enjoyable (: I liked the format of the poem, it made it a lot more visually interesting. A lot of poets don't understand the importance of the visual look of their poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the power in the first two lines. They lept off the page at me.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Doubt is a potent word isn't it? You conveyed the relation of wondering what is possible with doubt perfectly here :)
Guess we have to salute the darkness at times to find that shimmer of light with a message that shall guide us :)
xoxo

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Excellent work.

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Pax
i just love the format, it give the sense of intersection just like the title.
:strain of a mediocre life: a sad and beautiful line..
great job..


Posted 8 Years Ago


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Stunning!

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Added on July 15, 2012
Last Updated on July 15, 2012
Tags: doubt, life, light, philosophy

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joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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