awake

awake

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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2006

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     the boy awoke as the stars faded forever more
      nothing but spaces dark filled their void 
      no one ran or played in the alleys and parks anymore
      his dreams died as if someone pulled the plug
      day and night now seemed to not hold a significant change
     he no longer yearned for happiness in his heart
      or shivered in cold and rain
      his skin no longer carried a sense of beauty or image
      just a living shell containing his repetitive impulses
      his body did not walk with pride or dignity but dragged along
      a carcass, a host for numb emotions and dark realities 
     the world around him no longer shimmered in color and vibrancy 
      but hung like a gray and dreary blanket over his sleepless eyes
      others bump into him; running in a hurry to live their lies
      paying no attention and not even realizing he was there
      not that it would have mattered for he was elsewhere 
     no longer dazed and confused but shattered from reality
      torn from understanding
       weak from wisdom
          fatigue from fear
           he had awoke to an eternity without her  

© 2011 joshua deathdealer


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Beautifully expressed, the pain of losing our deepest love. A reasoning mind would never permit another to have such a powerful effect on it. Love knows no reason, love rends the heart and mends the heart. Life without love is empty.

Excellent work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Awe this seems so sad, you wrote this really well, I like this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Dark and despairing - the emotions you were on your sleeve, I guess. Well written!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is amazing. Extremely well written and emotional. It's definitely not lacking anything, in my opinion. I think everyone can relate to losing their love, but this piece really pegs it. Great writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love make us live and can make us died. I like the desire and feel of the words in this poem. I could feel the pain and disappointment in the words. A powerful ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


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letting go is a CHOICE, moving on is a PROCESS ☺

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sadness here too to awaken without someone you care for and such wonderful descriptions were in play creating great images. Anyways well done with expressions in the poetry and how the the readers can fall into.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really well done Josh! Great writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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"Torn from understanding"...very intense and well done..x

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow what raw emotion. Such courage. Awesome job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow what raw emotion. Such courage. Awesome job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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