soon

soon

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2011

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I am so ready to go home
our beautiful approximation
I cannot leave alone

my mind dwells on our reflection
purest sounds of our symphony
play upon the strings of my soul

this span of time holds no bars
or chains on my adoration
it blazes from me as if I were a star

hanging so high above, swept away in bliss
I cherish every moment spent with you
soon I will touch your face and wipe away all miss

all my roads lead to you

© 2011 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
i <3 sherri deathdealer

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I think its actualy a very lovely peice hun
you can tell its somthing heartfelt and actualy meaningful
unlike others on here that writes purely because their head is so high
and so full of themselves they manages to pick up random words and put
it in a line and call it work? I loved it keep it up

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Have I heard this language from you before?!? Hmmm...I think not! Oh! I thought on one other occasion I saw YOU, felt YOU, in your work, but here YOU are....again. And again. We are all so many parts, so many varied twisted unsuspecting angles....the pic of you and your love is just mouth wateringly tender and sweet and oozing of the innocence I adore.....yey! Beautiful! xo

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Like the poem,don`t like the name.Why would a young man be a deathdealer ? If you write poetry you are a lifegiver......

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very beautiful piece! I love your words, which created the best imagery. It was a very heartfelt piece filled with emotion. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BEAUTIFUL AND CREATIVE. LOVE THE WORDS YOU USE

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a beautiful poem. the anticipation of reuniting. Closing the space and time between you... Fabulous!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Keep it all in the moment.
and here I thought all roads lead to Bimini....

the middle two stanza's are stand alone pieces. this is all pure tone from beginning to end, yet timeless as well. Keep the good thing going.

Best Holiday wishes to you and family.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think its actualy a very lovely peice hun
you can tell its somthing heartfelt and actualy meaningful
unlike others on here that writes purely because their head is so high
and so full of themselves they manages to pick up random words and put
it in a line and call it work? I loved it keep it up

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ignoring the picture and video attached, this piece stands pretty well on its own. It's definitely an image of longing, though I wish I could care more about the relationship between the two but it's underdeveloped. As part of a larger narrative of your works (being that I've read most) I can understand the feelings more, but it's weak in describing the individual scene without the context provided. I'd suggest you take a moment to step back from your works and view them individually, as a stranger, with no preconceived notions of what the deeper meaning could be and I think it will help you to develop your voice into something very profound.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Home is a good words. We all need a place where we feel safe. A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rereading this... I think this about a person's longing to go home...the heavenly home. I think.

I still like this one.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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