the other side

the other side

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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06/2011 (published in Poets of Blood volume 2)

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darkness is traded away for a time
a night full of electricity and animation
a way for the hollows to stir their weariness 
sights and sounds blast into the atmosphere 
                                  
                     lights pulsate across this sea of specters
                     hell bent on the verge of becoming undone
                     stimulation awakens muddled sensations
                     marked up faces brighten upon rapture 
                            
I dance for the relief in the moment
reveling in the exemption of your horror
treacherous scars tell the detrimental tale
losing myself in this crowd of flesh  

                     maybe tonight surrender is in order 
                     letting the weight of vehemence lift  
                     perhaps providence will loosen her
                     grasp on the direction our feet take us                                                           

© 2014 joshua deathdealer


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second stanza lose the (s) on "pulsates" it interrupts your flow other than that your flow and imagery is spot on along with the direction of where you led this poem you touched without reaching, you as the writer became a magnet that drew your reader in.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Beautiful... the openng lines of the first and final stanza are in perfect sync.
Thanks for sharing
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Posted 4 Years Ago


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Last line of the third stanza, did you mean 'losing' instead of 'loosing'? Either way this poem was very good along with the poem and imagery. J'adore! -Ian

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wish I was there dancing

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Interesting, very interesting.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so Gothic! reading one after a long time .... well done Josh :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The volume of imagery adn detail lays heavy within the breast of my mind, a most classic piece, well done, good read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very detailed and lovely. I loved the third stanza also. Great work

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I personally also love the third stanza your poetry is deep and soreal I just love it with your big and dark words...you have real potential and inspiration I can tell

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree this is a very dark poem and you captured the essence of its content very well. I could easily see this poem quoted in the beginning or opening chapter of a novel. Well done

Posted 7 Years Ago


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The third stanza is my favorite as well.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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joshua deathdealer

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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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