public enemies

06/2011

two worlds apart, separate lives

tangled on the battle front

                 bodies lay mangled at our hands

oh the forest we have torn down

desperately trying to reach each other  

                 oh the cities we have laid to waste

only to be in each others arms

acting on our criminal attributes 

                  reduced to our primal instincts 

now we're riding around, raining terror

our bullets shower in waves

                   they will never take us alive, my love

feeling like a scene Bonnie & Clyde 

our essence is on this long road 

                   our liveliness beats from the speakers

you laugh at the blue lights in the mirror

pointing at the absurd billboards

                    the scenery flies by in perfection

in this moment I am truly happy

please don't wake me up

Author's Note

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

WOW!
There is so much in this short but powerful piece of writing! The metaphors and comparison to the army battlefield is really exhilarating. The poem creates a speed that matches that of the field. Though I comprehend the message you convey, my stronger interpretation of this is totally different to yours - for I do not see the cars so much - instead I relate to relations, changing and growth of landscapes.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
A

[Amila Jay]

Cool poem, Excellent write:)

[Jazique]

Ha ha sweet dream. That was a nice poem as the title is "public enemies" I'll admit a little dark on his perception but, as it all happens I guess in that position you could be truly happy. Anyways well done with descriptions, metaphors, and all.

[realmwriter]

Frickin awesome dream, Kinda sounds like it would be fun..! Great write.

[patricia]

i thought of bonny and clyde even before i read their names there. The young and rebellious will love all that. Thanks.

[LilyLily]

Reminds me of the love story in the movie, Public Enemies, which I loved. And I think you really put this piece together well. It seems to flow very smoothly, which I think is good to have in a poem when necessary.

[EMF]

Absolutley Stonking. A classic story handled with wit, nerve and class. A great story developed with great imagry and structure. Great work that just keeps on going until the cliamx, set off in the distance. Loved every second of it.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

seems like neat surrealism to me...

[Aidz]

Nice write, as other have stated a Bonnie n Clyde feel, so a kewl difference to otehr writes :)

[Inyourshadow]

Better a hail of bullets than the electric chair as no way to end a life shaking fouling yourself. The imagery a blur in this poem as we race along with you to your violent climax.
Love it, keep em' coming

[Priscilla Sayers]

Loved it! Spiced with adventure this reads weel, with an excitement that is nice to see coming from you. Keep the surprises coming. I like the way you shift into something new:)