between you and me

between you and me

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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07/2011

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I can see the unmerciful longings written across your face
as you walk the lengthy distance between you and me
fireworks explodes, adding to the anticipation that hangs
sparklers twirl, complementing your approaching presence 
this love is more than we could have ever been prepared for
these months apart have been so hard on our enduring love
always full of uncertain emotions and stealthy predators
I fight like a superhero while you sleep just to keep you safe
it is times like these that weigh so heavily on our hearts
worries have drilled their way into our once carefree lives
I may find another lover..that you are too old for me..
that I am too young for you..I may grow weary of waiting..
separation always brings forth these warranted questions
normal concerns and anguishes of our momentarily divide   
the long nights alone are slowly eating at us both and
we are never complete unless in each others arms

reaching you, I pull you close to me
quickly embrace me, daylight is coming
kill your fears my dearest, most beloved
let me kiss your lips and caress your hair
permit me to show you the authenticity
of a love that will outlast lifetimes 

 

© 2011 joshua deathdealer


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Its hard to find good poetry on this sub-genre of romance, It tends to be a bit cliche or bubblegum, but time and again you have proven that you can execute it with the surge of passion and pathos that is necessary to execute it well. That is a skill worth hanging onto.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The worlds views on our relationships shouldn't matter, all that matters is that WE are HAPPY with who we've chosen to fall in love with. My boyfriend is 7 years older than me, but who cares? I feel age is just a number & I was more drawn to his personality anyway. Nothing should matter when you fall in love, just that you both are happy enough in each others company. Looks, age, sexuality, religious views, etc should never matter. Just listen to your heart, it will tell you what is meant to be right & lead you in the proper direction. Also, I love Confide!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like the desire and the story in this poem. The statement allow the reader to feel the need and the struggle of time and life on a relationship.
"I may find another lover..that you are too old for me..
that I am too young for you..I may grow weary of waiting..
separation always brings forth these warranted questions"
Age is a number. Can effect where we are at and where we are going? Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is full of romance in a really alive and relevant way. Loved it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's nice to see romanticism isn't ddead yet - great writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Once again you have managed to blow me away. This is so romantic and sweet. The rhythm is spot on and I can't help remember the times someone has caused me to feel that way. This just swept me off my feet and took me to a place I'm only at with the one I love. Now I really wish he was here to hold me. Thanks so much for posting! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was really...sweet. I liked it

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Its hard to find good poetry on this sub-genre of romance, It tends to be a bit cliche or bubblegum, but time and again you have proven that you can execute it with the surge of passion and pathos that is necessary to execute it well. That is a skill worth hanging onto.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I could feel the weight of the world as I read this poem. Such elagence. Such passion as i let the word fulfill me.

The one thing I would ask is break up that bad by into smaller paragraphs. Again awesome work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very passionate and beautiful. Thank you for writing this it's so beautiful.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really lovely, beautiful, and magical!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Casket City, FL



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