murder death kill

murder death kill

A Chapter by joshua deathdealer
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10/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Five)

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"187"
He spoke nervously into his two way
as he walked up to the lifeless body
that lay twisted on the dirt road.
The gore that surrounded her was
illuminated by his vehicle's headlights.

Looking, he could see that her
throat appeared to have been 
ripped out or cut. Blood still
gushed out the fatal wound,
flowing in the dusty tire tracks.

"187"
"I repeat. I gotta 187, white female
out here on old wire road. It's 
pretty bad. Requesting backup.." the
young policeman says as he turns back 
towards his patrol car. Three feet in 
front of him stood a person.

A man. His clothes were torn and 
he was not seemingly shaken by the 
extreme cold. Unshaven and disheveled.
Blood covered mouth.  "Oh my God" was 
all the rookie managed to say while trying 
to raise his gun.

As he attempts to train his sights, he is 
slammed to the ground. Knocking out his breath.
Flailing around, his arms are pushed back by 
the savage man. He feels the killers teeth sinking 
into his throbbing throat. Pain explodes and
claustrophobia. Causing him to pass out.

Awaking, he realizes the psychopath is 
gulping the red, bubbling flow that pours 
from his neck. Struggling in panic, he pushes 
back at the assailant. The attacker screeches.
Grabs the lawman's head and smashes it repeatedly on 
the lime rock. After licking at the stickiness on his 
fingers the deranged man stands up and walks off 
into the trees.

"235 do you copy. Come in 235"

 


© 2013 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
I took a different approach to this one. Put more of a story tale style into this fifth installment of the series. Less emotional and more gore. lol

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Wow, this was purely dark and terrorizing. This simple man is calling out for help but instead gets taken down by the killer as well with no hope of his whereabouts being found. In a way, its really sad but in another matter, the description was clarifying what you wanted to point out.

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Fricking excellent. Dark, disturbing, delectable.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Wow, I can almost picture this, super write:)

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Aw...I got goosebumps while reading this! Haha! Very dark poem...Excellent...♥ the concept... :)))

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Not only your author's note says it but the poem does too... lots of gore, sort of grotesque. Right from the beginning I love how you have written this.
"The gore that surrounded her was
illuminated by his car's headlights."
This is a awesome write, i love it, all of the gore and dark details, and how different you wrote it as a scene like a story... really well written. Love this !

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Well then I guess he should have shot first and got on the horn later huh?

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I could picture it well from your description. I'm not realy into blood and gore, but you wrote it well. Thanks.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Well done :) I felt as though I was there with your great ability to describe the scene:) Dark and full of gore but it made an excellent read...xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Wow it's scary!

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I like this poem. A complete tale in so few words. Remind people to check out their area for unknown attack. I like the complete story and the very good ending in this poem. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

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