almost home

12/2011

The darkness that washes over this barren land

besets my course, bringing my advancements to

a screeching halt, held at bay by the demoniac

spirits that trample the corridors of my thoughts 

Pushed backwards and under the blacken waves

of negative energy that is building around me,

snaring my ankles, pulling me downward in oily 

depths that structure this image that I dwell  

 

Every light of hope is snuffed as malignity grows

over the blue skies that once were, here I am,

lost without you in a world of my own creation,

displaced in a shade of eternal stagnant gray  

I will still trod towards the warmth on the 

unsteady horizon, memories of you will push

my bruised feet forwards, guiding my broken

heart closer to the one that it still beats for

     

Author's Note

Reviews

[Audrey Howitt]

I will still trod towards the warmth on the
unsteady horizon, memories of you will push
my bruised feet forwards, guiding my broken
heart closer to the one that it beats for

We move on because we must. There is no tomorrow sometimes-there is only one breath and then the next one and so on--but as we put one foot in front of the other, over time, we find that we have created a path and often it leads to unexpected places--keep trodding my friend

[Lily Mae]

This has your magic going in full force.. love it Josh..xx

[roarke]

I dig everything except the first stanza. Not exactly sure why, wording, frame... just something. Maybe just focus on "the hallways of our thoughts" for that opening stanza. Poetry is tough, that's why I'm not a poet. By reactions, I've learned you can't take a fire ax to poetry the same way you can with fiction stories. My barbarianism shows when I speak of poetry.

btw, nice poem.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good one..!!!

[Matt "Mickey" Denney]

I like the way that your words and expressions capture the feelings of desperation. I really like your writing :)

[Kim's Poems]

Such a beuatiful, wonderful read. I really enjoyed this,
You are very talented.

[BlueDreams]

You've peened down here a great craft which is wrapped with the visualizing imagery ... :-)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Beautiful. Always you have the passion and the depths to draw the reader into your yearning, your pain... It becomes our own as we read and that is something! Amazing write!

[Kenneth The Poet]

I love the third stanza. The darkness always forces out the light, doesn't it? Nice work overall.

[Cassie Fraga]

wow!!! I appreciate this piece Josh... very deep... you are a gifted writer indeed my friend!!
**tips my lyrical wand to you**

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You are one deep in thought writer and that is a talent