breakthrough

breakthrough

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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06/2012

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a contrast of colors grace my sight
as I wipe your murk from my eyes

am I am truly seeing for the first time 

gasping heavily,  I rip at the extensions
of your reach,  pulling myself out of
varlet mentalities and dead errors

weights slide off my back like water
while transitioning from your black
stage set to demoralize the broken

I can breathe with a smile and a sigh
the flowers reach up to me as blue
rushes to fill my once stormy gray

the sun is now shining as I walk away

birds chirp in harmony with every  
step and the breeze feels like gold
 

© 2012 joshua deathdealer


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Is that you up there in this vid? What an adorable young man you are/were/are. Highly doubtful that "adorable" was the look you were going for, but as I am many years your elder I get to say it anyway. This poem of yours here - there is light and hope within which is in contrast to the dark pictures you often paint. I really appreciate all of them, but it IS nice to see a glimpse of your light every now and again. Emotive as all of your works are, but I like the strength you've found and described in this one. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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The one line second stanza threw me off briefly but I enjoyed this poem. It's hopeful. The transition from dark days to the day where yyou can finally let go and move on. J'adore! -Ian

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing.. Beautiful! I love this..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

good vibes of emotion =]

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful and refreshing. I love the use of imagery and metaphor here. A pleasure to read. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's always a great relief getting the weight off your back. I like the way you express yourself. You don't seem angry or too bitter, only relieved to be done with it. Great job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A telling and touching piece, well done, good read.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very touching and inspirational!!! I like the way you formatted every scene specifically towards the end. I like your style and hope to see more poems similar to your style.

Love your work :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short but such a meaningful write!!! i love the positive feel here as i read. =) it's just stunning! Amazing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rejuvenation ! Amazing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice music video. Love the words and descriptions in imagery you used wrapped with the feeling in this. Love this part:
"the flowers reach up to me as blue
rushes to fill my once stormy gray"

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 1, 2012
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Tags: light, dark, life, death

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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