circus

Welcome to the circus

of darkness and despair

the first act, a boy

always treated unfair

you'll enjoy this one

as you watch his heart tear

and he realizes

no one will ever care

for the second act

you watch as he goes through hell

it gets worse everyday

as you can probably tell

no hope for him

but I guess ohh well

last but not least

watch as stress takes it's toll

ripping him apart, piece by piece

slowly tearing away his soul

bringing you great joy

knowing he will never be whole

never, ever

again...

Author's Note

your thoughts?

Reviews

[HeIsWe]

I like it. Its great.

[Bridgette's Ink]

My thoughts? Seriously, phenomenal. The way you used the circus theme and the boys "acts" was so creative, seems whimsical yet mysterious and dark at the same time.My thoughts? Seriously, phenomenal. The way you used the circus theme and the boys "acts" was so creative, seems whimsical yet mysterious and dark at the same time.

[Que]

This is great. From the very first verse I just automatically gave it a tune to it in my mind, because it really sounds like a song...or some sort of creepy nursery rhyme, lol. Except, it didn't work out in some parts, because there were either too many syllables or too little, and I was just thinking: it would be awesome if you managed to work it out and give it some rhythm, don't you think? I think it would come out great, and it would definitely give it a more...I don't know the word, lol. A more 'professional' / 'defined'...way of being?
Eh, it's late, I can't think of words at the moment.
Anyhow, great job, I really loved it. I'll read more of your stuff soon, by the way.
Cheers and have a good day. :)