Eventually

Eventually

A Poem by Canicus

Blind I wander around

arms out searching for hope

but there is none

I have no way to cope

 

trapped in this cage

with darkness and despair

no way to breakout

into the eyes of sorrow I stare

 

locked inside

with the vicious beast

life with it's teeth showing

ready to devour me, it's feast

 

trying to hold on as long as I can

I don't know how much longer it will last

all I feel is pain

putting my heart in a cast

 

I can't keep this up

for much longer

I will eventually give up

for it is much stronger

© 2011 Canicus


Author's Note

Canicus
maybe a few misspellings, but what do you think?

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Well well well... I really love the rhyming you play with through out the poem. The rhyming words you chose fit so perfectly, and it all flows so nicely. Love the simple title that fits the emotions in the poem, as well as the imagery you use to describe the emotions and scenes. Enjoyed.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Oh this is great! I thought that the rhyme gave it more depth... which is good, I couldn't see many spelling mistakes either. A really good peace. And very spiritual.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This was a great piece. I enjoyed it. I loved the flow it was amazing. The whole piece was emotional and I love the emotions. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Spelling is good. YOur writing is becoming more rich in detail as the vocabulary gets larger. Really good.

Writing keeps the dream alive
~V~

Posted 12 Years Ago


spelling is spot on. Your writing gets better and better. I really enjoyed reading this. A wonderful poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Not a single misspelled word. I checked. ^^ Lovely poem. Keep writing! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Your words seem to be screaming to get out, but it's like you're shouting against the wind with no audience. Really, I think you're in need of someone to talk to. Not in the "wow, you're crazy"-kind of way, but rather in a "you need someone to confide in"-kind of way. Someone you're really comfortable talking to. That and/or a hug. *hugs*

Posted 12 Years Ago


brillient

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amazing!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow. This is brilliant. You did a wonderful job with imagery and word choice.
I love it.
Keep it up my friend.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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