Where?

Where?

A Poem by Kerri Hart

I wriggle, fidgit, and squirm

in your gaze

Your eyes burning holes in my soul

you smile, snicker, and laugh at me

and yet, I am invisible

 

I feel your wrath pounding me by the second

your jokes are pulling my hair

i am in an escapable hell

But, I am still unseen.

 

 

© 2012 Kerri Hart


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This one is going in my favorites - It is amazing how someone can make you feel as if you don't matter - Just with simple looks and words, you have described it vividly here - great job

Posted 9 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

9 Years Ago

thank you
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Pax
short and very nice... its seems a hard situation but still unseen...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

ahh yes...
thank you so much :)
That is powerful. That first like is perfect. Just readin wriggle, fidget, and squirm makes me, sort of, tweak out.

It reminds me of that weird sort of self-judgement that I used to inflict on myself. I'd feel like everyone hates me despite the fact that they probably didn't even care enough to see me. I seemed to prefer being disliked than completely invisible.

I don't know if that's anything like what you were going for but it definitely tapped into some emotional point for me.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

hahaha same, prob why i wrote that line xD

i would disaagree with tht, i don't enjoi be.. read more
I love those last two lines, such a powerful emotional write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

thank you :D
Love the last bit... 'jokes pulling my hair' and all... that's really good. Difficult when someone or something has such control over you. Nice!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

thank you!
Talk about GHOSTRIDER here, it's like the Penance Stare! Good work Josi!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

hahaha im glad you liked it
-K.J. Pennington
This reminds me of bullies- how they can make you feel like you're constantly watched but at the same time worthless and not deserving of time. I wonder though if in this line, " I wriggle, fidget, and screrm" You mean squirm? Still overlooking grammar I love this poem! It's vivid and clear with a good ending. Great write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

YES sqirm! i mean sqirm! hahaha i spent forEVER trying to remember how to spell that word! thank you.. read more
Peaceworker22

10 Years Ago

Squirm silly, squirm like a worm! Jk. Don't forget z u!
Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

:}
That first stanza is nothing short of magical. A very beautiful piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

10 Years Ago

thank you im glad you enjoyed it :)

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