Where?

Where?

A Poem by Kerri Hart

I wriggle, fidgit, and squirm

in your gaze

Your eyes burning holes in my soul

you smile, snicker, and laugh at me

and yet, I am invisible

 

I feel your wrath pounding me by the second

your jokes are pulling my hair

i am in an escapable hell

But, I am still unseen.

 

 

© 2012 Kerri Hart


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This one is going in my favorites - It is amazing how someone can make you feel as if you don't matter - Just with simple looks and words, you have described it vividly here - great job

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

thank you
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Pax
short and very nice... its seems a hard situation but still unseen...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

ahh yes...
thank you so much :)
That is powerful. That first like is perfect. Just readin wriggle, fidget, and squirm makes me, sort of, tweak out.

It reminds me of that weird sort of self-judgement that I used to inflict on myself. I'd feel like everyone hates me despite the fact that they probably didn't even care enough to see me. I seemed to prefer being disliked than completely invisible.

I don't know if that's anything like what you were going for but it definitely tapped into some emotional point for me.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

hahaha same, prob why i wrote that line xD

i would disaagree with tht, i don't enjoi be.. read more
I love those last two lines, such a powerful emotional write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

thank you :D
Love the last bit... 'jokes pulling my hair' and all... that's really good. Difficult when someone or something has such control over you. Nice!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

thank you!
Talk about GHOSTRIDER here, it's like the Penance Stare! Good work Josi!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

hahaha im glad you liked it
-K.J. Pennington
This reminds me of bullies- how they can make you feel like you're constantly watched but at the same time worthless and not deserving of time. I wonder though if in this line, " I wriggle, fidget, and screrm" You mean squirm? Still overlooking grammar I love this poem! It's vivid and clear with a good ending. Great write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

YES sqirm! i mean sqirm! hahaha i spent forEVER trying to remember how to spell that word! thank you.. read more
Peaceworker22

7 Years Ago

Squirm silly, squirm like a worm! Jk. Don't forget z u!
Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

:}
That first stanza is nothing short of magical. A very beautiful piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kerri Hart

7 Years Ago

thank you im glad you enjoyed it :)

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Kerri Hart

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