Train Whistle

Train Whistle

A Poem by JR
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hurting...

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Please No CSS

I’m left with a profound tug in my sternum

 

the last notes of your song

still ringing true in my head

 

train whistle…

 

departing dark

into uncertain night

© 2008 JR


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indelibly, the world is made to match our moods...there's always a poetic hook to hang the picture of our hearts...concise, taught, as spare as sharp pain, with a longing after...they go and leave that awful hole, forever for rent, well done...

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like how the image is left hanging, whilst being simultaneously complete.
No excess here, every word counts.
Great work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Cool! Picturing a train dissapearing down a long rail into the night.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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