Bedroom

I never felt alive

Until the boy I liked

Stood in the room 

Where no one had ever been

And touched the things

Only my hands had ever felt

My world had been dormant

Before he came and awoke it

Though it wasn’t until 

After he gave me breath

And snatched it just as fast

That I realized 

I had been dead before

Painful as it was

I will never regret it

Because at least

I had felt alive

Reviews

[Kianzeht]

Correct enjambement and similings but has much to be improved yet I enjoyed it very much.

[light and ashes]

sad...................I hope you find more things that make you feel alive other than that..and please not drugs. That never ends well.
God bless you. And good luck to you in your life.
May you find love and peace.

[Chris]

You show such an awareness of the impact emotional awakening has on a person - and not just a girl either. And that impact is intensified as other things pick up THAT aura ...and hold memories and "special" meanings.

Love is an oft "bandied" term ...but...emotional intensity is quite real.

[Brad Dehler]

Interesting depiction of regrettable acts mixed with something cherished. Hopefully all that was involved in this poem came to be, Your heart was not broken.

[willweb]

Sometimes that is all we can hope to get out of certain situations, to feel alive but still, you learned what it feels like and how to feel that way again and hopefully how to without the pain that came in the end this time. Really cool. I like this a lot.

[John the Baptist]

He gave breath and then he snatched it. You probably could have done better, but if the end result was positive, let it be.