Sipping Soup

Twinkling stars

Sipping Soup

 

I wonder why stars twinkle

Possibly it’s my sight

Because I blink so often

That half of day is night

 

My eyelids flicking up and down

Is really quite a problem

Cause when I try and sip my soup

My spoon is always wobblin

 

Some goes in my eye

And some gets up my nose

No matter how I try

That’s how the story goes

 

Tho, when I write a poem

It’s much less of a crime

Cause when it’s an awful write

I only notice half the time

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Dave. You really must concentrate on your soup and stop worrying about why the stars twinkle. That way you can be sure your soup gets in your mouth and not your up your nose. What flavour was it? Broccoli and Stilton is my favourite, make it myself. I like the humour here.

Chris

[john l smith]

You caught me at the computer again.
I seem to be here much too often but watching curling now and I can't seem to sit down without having the thing on my lap
Have not had Broccoli and stilton
Is it quite easy to see?
I'll get the grandkids to help with my aiming procedure
Good eve.

[Chris Shaw]

You can see the broccoli and stilton very easily Dave if you look at it instead of watching the curling:) Good afternoon to ya

[Robert Trakofler]

No bad writes just bad readers! I love the cadence,I love the whimsy, I love your sense of humor

[john l smith]

Thanks very much
Just a word of warning. There is a virus around our area that has wiped out all the bunnies, both good and bad
Thanks for (e-mail only) visit
Dave B

[Robert Trakofler]

i have a virus?

[john l smith]

No no, not U
Rabbits around our area are affected
Just another failed attempt at a joke (typically me)
Apologies if you were offended

[Robert Trakofler]

oh phew! I was worried good good :)

[Ryan I]

I like how it is funny and sad at the same time. There is a nice sense of optimism though that engulfs this poem. Thank you for sharing.

[john l smith]

Yes, I am optimistic enough to hope that one day I won't keep getting soup in my eye
Too hard to read unless it is alphabet soup
Dave B

[sette]

nothing is perfect in this world and that makes life interesting as it is

[john l smith]

Truthfully said
Thanks for visit
Dave

[barleygirl]

You've just jumped over the moon when it comes to creativity. Who else could combine this hodge-podge of ideas & craft it into a logical-sounding poem? I've always loved your sense of writing adventure, but this one feels like you might've gone too far into the jungle *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[john l smith]

That over the moon thing gets my imagination going
Tic tic tic, I feel something happening up in my foggy brain
Time 4 more soup sipping
Dave

[Samuel Dickens]

Jittery eyelids--that's what I got after seeing Aunt Bertha bend over to feed the cat while wearing no underwear. (I made that up.) I know it's a problem, but please don't give up soup. (One of my sisters swore off corn on the cob because the bursting kernels splattered up onto her glasses)

[john l smith]

dear old Aunt Bertha must have been a sight to behold
Good morn Mr. D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hah I used to wonder that too about the stars as a kid, but that they winked at me lool
I have yet to come across an awful write from you btw, and I doubt if I will ;)
If only one could have soup without spilling and write poems alongside too...!
Cool write, this one.

[john l smith]

Good morn (here) good eve (there ?)
Yes that soup drip really is a frustration
Enjoy your eve
Dave