Last Dance

Last Dance

A Poem by justjenn_2u

When my sins are forsaken

a sinner’s healed bruise

recovers from the brightness

inspired by God’s tune

 

Like releasing burdens crutch

I’m freed from the cage

pulling up the anchor

the dance stops on stage

 

Beautiful memories in motion

my own lullaby

a life filled with curses

has made this woman cry

 

Memories of detachment

with stage fright ending show

facing her tomorrow

her hands release the pole

 

A serenade, a second chance

between the lows and highs

life and sin embroil

her old dance has now died

 

Moods of many lovers

from her soul she now writes

on her empty pages

to get her through the night

© 2014 justjenn_2u


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A beautiful poem.
"Beautiful memories in motion
my own lullaby
a life filled with curses
has made this woman cry"
I understand the poem. When we left with memory and thoughts only. We need kind memories to be able to write and dance in sweet dreams once again. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

I appreciate your heartfelt review Coyote. Look forward to visiting your page.



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Deeply written and felt with inspiring beacons...:).................

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

I am appreciative of your kind review.
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are welcome...:).....................
your work inspires and challenges me. As I've said before , we write from the same vantage point, because we write from the heart, and share the same addictions, be it life, the pursuit of some symbolence of happiness, or just out of pure disparity of heart...I get it...I get you...your work is incredible!!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I have felt this myself Jenn, I loved it very much:))))))))))))

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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7 Years Ago

Ok smile I have lots more just have it down for right now
justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

I will be there
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7 Years Ago

Thanks Jenn:))))))))))))))
Beautifully written..very deep indeed and one of your best that i have read :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautiful poem.
"Beautiful memories in motion
my own lullaby
a life filled with curses
has made this woman cry"
I understand the poem. When we left with memory and thoughts only. We need kind memories to be able to write and dance in sweet dreams once again. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

I appreciate your heartfelt review Coyote. Look forward to visiting your page.
best thing I read in a while ................ very deep indeed, superb write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

Thank you Wilderness. Your words mean so much.
A very personal and metaphorical poems which introduces many beautiful layers of a beautiful heart.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

I appreciate your review Avinash. : )
Love this disenchanted serenade....

Moods of many lovers
from her soul she now writes
on her empty pages
to get her through the dark night

Excellent last stanza, outstanding read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you took the time to review. Peace.
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Pleasure was mine jenn.
This whole poem is graceful in its rhythm

A serenade, a second chance
between the lows and highs
life and sin embroil
her old dance has now died

the last line of this stanza threw me off a little. the syllables don't seem to be in time with the rest of the meter maybe? Just a thought.

I'm happy glad to see you posting new stuff. We've missed you :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


justjenn_2u

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the review. I edited and believe fixing the last sentence was the answer. I don't have .. read more

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I write from my heart. I follow my instinct. I live impulsively. I never feel like my feet are firmly grounded as I am a free spirit. I am a very intuitive person, sometimes to the point it hurts .. more..

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