Unanswered Questions

Unanswered Questions

A Poem by justjenn_2u

Your silence
louder than noise

Where'd you go?

Your touch
cold as liquid helium

Why'd you leave?

Your eyes
penetrating as trauma

Where'd you go?

Your appearance
vanishing as a ghost

Why'd you leave?

Your mouth
echoing voices in my ear

Where'd you go?

Your memory
eternal as salvation

Stay with me


© 2012 justjenn_2u


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I'm with Pax on this: I can't tell which is your greater fear--to have him gone and to be alone again, or to have him back, along with his unquestionable faults. Any piece of writing this terse that can elicit that much thinking must be rated effective!

Posted 8 Years Ago


An eerie evocation. Knowing some of your other poems, this one walks a hi-wire between love-desire, & the memory of hated transgression ("Your touch/cold as liquid helium. . .Your eyes/penetrating as trauma").

Edgy vanishing act of the mysterious lover haunts. Like mortality. Like the enigma of our days.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Interesting. I could see this being lyrics to a song.

Posted 8 Years Ago


very nice style and flow. sometimes the way something is said holds as much meaning as the words themselves. i think that's the case here. stark, simple, and well executed.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this flow of this poem. Sometimes there just isn't an answer....

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love this piece Jenn.
It conveys so much pain and emptiness in between these chosen words. There are times in life when someone leaves our lives and they give us instead of their presence, a deep gash in our hearts where they belonged instead. Soul ties are so strong. I love this. This is straight from the heart.


Posted 9 Years Ago


"Your silence, louder than noise..." I love that!! Many times when men ignore me, or are silent, sometimes my mind and thoughts get so loud I'm screaming, in my own head! lol. Beautiful poem! I had to favorite this one. You are definitely writing some great words lately. As always.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like the sparseness of this poem. Very ghostly. It's a question without an answer, a statement, and an observation wrapped up in one fleeting package. The narrator starts out overwhelmed, progresses into fear, but then accepts his/her resolve to accept the situation as it is. This is a complete poem with a clear beginning, middle, and end. Thanks for sending this my way! Really good stuff!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Nice poem. Seems a bit racy though when it is read. I'm having a little trouble with this stanza "Your eyes
penetrating as trauma."

Could you explain its meaning please?

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was cool and I like the way it flowed.
Kind of sad but still a great poem.

Kelley

Posted 10 Years Ago



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I write from my heart. I follow my instinct. I live impulsively. I never feel like my feet are firmly grounded as I am a free spirit. I am a very intuitive person, sometimes to the point it hurts .. more..

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