UNSURETY

UNSURETY

A Poem by jwenjwen
"

fear isn't new to anyone, is it?

"


And all these moments spent,

So free and unquestioned,

Under a mutual fear of uncertainty,

How I wish I knew what lurks underneath that calmness,

Perhaps a storm that wreaks havoc,

Perhaps a dream achieving its completion.

© 2013 jwenjwen


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Love the last two lines of this poem. The repetition is great. Perhaps separate those lines into a couplet to enforce the effect. This may sound picky, and it is indeed a personal preference, but I do not favour the use of "lies" in lines 3 and 4. I figure you can use more artistic words to generate equal or greater meaning.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jwenjwen

10 Years Ago

thank you so much for reading it :) and for giving me suggestions. I think you're right, I noticed a.. read more



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Love the last two lines of this poem. The repetition is great. Perhaps separate those lines into a couplet to enforce the effect. This may sound picky, and it is indeed a personal preference, but I do not favour the use of "lies" in lines 3 and 4. I figure you can use more artistic words to generate equal or greater meaning.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jwenjwen

10 Years Ago

thank you so much for reading it :) and for giving me suggestions. I think you're right, I noticed a.. read more

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Added on September 9, 2013
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