Connected?

Feeling a little bit heartbroken

My lips quivering

Eyes swelling

Tears dropping

 

Up at the sky I’m looking

Sky you’re also grieving?

Author's Note

I don't know why but a simple slip of the tongue makes me feel... rejected... What do you think? Please comment as critically as you want...

Reviews

[Miiki]

it's really beautiful! Even though it's short, it expresses so much with its simplicity and beauty of it. I really enjoyed it, sorry it took a month to finally get to it.
100/100

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

thanks :3 don't worry bout that, I'm still finishing reading some RRs here

[Rhianne Ney]

Wow... that's epic when you're crying inside then it suddenly rains
lol

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

They understaaaand :D

[Rhianne Ney]

course they do

[Rhianne Ney]

mas nakakainis kung umaaraw tapos naiiyak ka

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

xhet wlang makarelate sayo noh? kakainis naman

[Rhianne Ney]

Haha tama yan

[Anonymous Girl]

Its so real true for me as well... A single slip of tongue can also make me feel rejected!! Nice write short but so sweet and sad! Mostly crying!
Keep writing :)
100/100

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Yes it's so powerful sometimes :D We can handle this >:D Thank you for the time

[Anonymous Girl]

You are welcome :)

[Pax]

your just sad my friend... you just needed a pat in the shoulders that its ok...its just a misunderstanding... think positive and hope for tomorrows blissful sunshine...
nicely expressed emotions..Great!

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Thank you kuya :) I'm doing well and thanks for your time :D

[Pax]

Glad to hear that...and you're welcome.

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Sad I have to say. I hope you've passed this feeling everyone does even the sky when it rains its crying (of happiness or of saddness I don't know) You've opened my mind to see that everyone and everything has feelings, good and bad. Recover from it soon let your tears fade away you'll see you'll feel much better. 100/100 Truly amazing poetry :)

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Aww thank you for the advice I'm getting over it :) Thank you also for your wonderful review

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You're welcome! :D

[Cynthia Man]

We all feel sad and depressed for a reason or none for sometimes, but for myself, I feel kinda relieved to know that I still feel sad, because to me, it's much more heartbreaking then NOT being able to feel sad...
So, well, and the sun will shine in no seconds:D
I like this poem, although it might be short, but there're still a lot of emotions, and i like the combination with the picture :D

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

True and lovely thoughts you have there, thank you for sharing them :) Feeling sad really is better than not to be able to feel anything, to not be able to sympathize to not be able to be inspired :) Thank you for your review

[emmy bon]

short and ok, nice picture matched, well done

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

thank you :D

[de_maruf]

word selection is nice
good work
keep writing

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Thank you :D