Can I Love You?

It was cold out
It was dark
Just like the space inside my heart
Empty and needing to be filled

I found a flicker of a flame
He smiled but then
His eyes weren't the same
As mine

So I put my hand in his and cried

I laid my head on his chest
Took a breath of his scent
And I knew
I said, you may not love me
But can I love you?

It's still cold out
It's still dark
There's still nothing in me that's warm
I'm empty and needing to be filled

I found his skin soft and brown
He gave me a smile
That was more like a frown
Like mine

So I kissed his lips and I cried

I laid my head on his chest
Took a breath of his scent
And I knew
I said, you may not love me
But can I love you?

It will always be cold out
It will always be dark
It will always be empty in my heart
There's something wrong with me through and through
So you may not love me,
But can I love you?

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

this was very nice ,serene dreamy words of a vacant heart,sad and silent..no one lived there,but i hoped and dreamed of someone to start a fire, a move in there ,if you could not love me,maybe will still be a hope that i could love you..i had lots to say,this was so exciting to read..you could tell lots more
lovely write

[BlackPrince]

I like the rhetorical aspect of the title and how that's used in the repetition as refrain.

It was beautifully written full of love, passion and truth.

[lessa (kenzie)]

Wow! This is so very good, I enjoyed this write so very much