Blur

If I could hold that shaking hand,

Lost in the clasp of smoke and sand,

“Holy”! Is it a part me??

It heralds a mystery beneath,

Sunken heart can only weep,

“Hold me”! Mourns the erratic claw,

Under wraps of anger and sorrow!

Alas! How smiles have betrayed me!

How sanity has hurled me!

I grope for that warmth, raving,

Aah! Here comes Apollo; Erasing,

The formidable blur of defeat!

Yes, you are a part of Me,

Inseparable love, thus flee!!

Reviews

[Eric Cox]

Cool creating. Unique, your piece is a cool read. Nicely done.

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow, I so loved this poem. You have such a touching and beautiful and unique writing style that I really appreciate,

[Frieda P]

I've never quite read befuddled love written in such an eloquent manner. You have an amazing talent.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you so very much Frieda.. I feel blessed :)

[Leigh]

This has cast many images in my mind. Fine writing and very well constructed

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank yous !

[kelvin]

Nicely written i enjoyed it you state a strong emotional attachment to one stating they're a part of you inseparable love for this is powerful as always keep writing fellow writer

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks Kelvin :)

[kelvin]

You're very welcome

[KeeD]

This was intense, the emotion it brings forth is exuberant. It has that bittersweet quality to it which a poem of this genre requires, great work.
"“Holy”! Is it a part me??" I could be wrong but did you mean to say "Holy" Is it a part 'of' me??.
You never disappoint, this is a classic poem that's very well written.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you so much Keegan.. I love your work too. Cheers!

[Sami Khalil]

I really enjoyed this write...

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you so much:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[khalid]

very nicely-penned. i like how it went in such a nice way. i like the feeling of love and passion which develops till soulmate feelings...i like how you have picked the suitable words suiting the subject of the poem..

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you very much.

[khalid]

my pleasure