Wish all dreams were true

A harsh “HOUR” of darkness emerged from its dwell,

High-in-spirits to converse, thus my sleep I had to quell.

Have traversed in typhoons and ebbs of tides,

He promulgated so with pride.

None, dare not cut off my wings and thorns,

Swank the tyrant with swords.

 

I gazed upon this colossal figure- majestic and blurred,

“If only thou merge with my soul”, longing my prayer to be heard.

He whirled his wand like cosmos on the dance floor,

Zoop!! Where did he diminish?? Thrusting me to explore??

 

Smiled the new Sun with a welcoming gaze,

Divine!! Flew my soul above its rays!!

‘TIME’ was now ‘ME’ and vice-versa,

We are on our way to Britain and Lanka.

 

How rich from its richness dooms!!

How fairer to its fairest blooms!!

How savagery burns in its own flame!!

How amity shines in its reign!!

Time with a spying eye, rewards or crucifies,

Showed me all, as my mate in disguise!!

 

The mighty Time fanned its mightier cloak,

Engulfed me in silence as I woke!!

Zoop! Where did you diminish? Thrusting me to NOW EXPLORE?

Reviews

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

quite nice indeed
very catchy
hats up!!

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks a tonne

[Rajkamal]

is it the fault of our times? Overusing punctuation and font design? Why do you have to lay emphasis by blowing the font size of the desired words. And why so many exclamation marks? Aren't you then trying to lead the reader where you want them to go? Don't you like your readers to be independent? Your poems feels like contemporary sitcoms where there every minute there is some sound prop, hinting whether the viewers should smile, laugh, sigh or cry.

[Kajal Gulabani]

It's like directing a movie with it's pitch.. Without dimensions, action is incomplete. Incomplete action thus results in incomplete reactions. And I want my independent readers to feel every word I pen down and thrust into complete reactions. Different ppl, different views.. :)

[Clayton Bardwell]

Mystery and magic. This took me back to the old Arabian Knights. This my favorite of yours. I'm keeping this one for myself.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Hi Clayton.. Ur reviews are always a motivation for me.. Keep encouraging me this way.. Thanks.

[hardik]

Ingenious use of words. Awesome :-)

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank yous!

[hardik]

Can I request you to have a look at my poems?

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the description in the poem.
"Smiled the new Sun with a welcoming gaze,
Divine!! Flew my soul above its rays!!
‘TIME’ was now ‘ME’ and vice-versa,
We are on our way to Britain and Lanka."
Good flow of thoughts and I like the ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank u so very much.. I feel blessed!

[Frieda P]

Your poetry is so complex and inviting. I need to read it twice usually to get the full effect from it. There's something mystical about the way you put words together. Another amazing read.

[Kajal Gulabani]

M flattered Frieda.. U made my weekend.. Hugsss :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, awh sweet. :-)

[MOON]

Lovely write has olde worlde charm, romantic dreams.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Dreams are the strangest things! You gave a flavour to the mystery of the dream in this piece

[Kajal Gulabani]

Yep John.. They indeed are !

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow amazing and otherworld like in its beauty.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks Ahmad :)

[R.T. Edwins]

I liked it. I'm not sure I have any editing to offer, though. What were you thinking about when you wrote it?

Made me think of what it would be like to die and re-immerge with the source of all life. (particularly the part about 'TIME" was now 'ME' and vice-versa")

[Kajal Gulabani]

It is a dream which I am talking about in which I encountered 'Time'.. He showed me the indelible power he withholds which no one can elude.. The facts and faces of today's world made me write this.. Awakening is what I term it as... :)