Hide and Seek

I wish 'Hide and Seek' was just a game,
That pampered our childhood days,
Alien were we to this world of mystery,
Shower on me that radiance again.

Where art those ignorant eyes?
Which knew nothing but path to the real.

I wish this game had it's confines to only FUN,
Sigh ! Clouds of lies have spread beyond
The fog of truth and winds of faith,
Storms of deceit has long begun.

Hide a little flaw , Hide a huge blow,
Hide as well the demon within.
Alas! Seek the rains of happiness then,
Did they rinse your souls though ?

Reviews

[Anna a. S.M.]

Oh this reminds me of my childhood.
It's sad ... and well written

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you..

[Daniel Malone]

I enjoyed the use of early modern English. It's a task in itself to utilize it without an air of pomp, but you managed quite well. As for the material, the best poetry transcends all cultures by finding common joys, anxieties, and regrets in ALL people. This piece does exactly that. Kudos on a very well written and compelling work.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank yous !!!!

[Devanshu Rajput]

loved line was heart touching......loved the great piece

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

welcome

[Frieda P]

Compelling read, many thoughts went into this one. If only childhood could be innocence and fun and last a lifetime. Nicely pen'd. Love the last line...

'Did they rinse your souls though ?'

That one echoed in my head!

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you Frieda.. Ur reviews are always encouraging..

[MOON]

Lovely write chiidhood special place grown up games more difficult.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks :)

[Leigh]

I like your style and use of older English, this really gives this a classical feel,

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks Leigh :)

[KeeD]

very creative and well thought off, love the way you've written this poem. hat's off great write Kajal

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank you so very much Keegan :)

[Jem Sagcal]

Wonderful poem,p. i loved the creative use of words and the flow you gave it.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thanks :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes childhood kept us innocent but think of the colour in our journey across uncertain terrain. Food for poets me thinks.

[Kajal Gulabani]

True.. :) :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of the language and your thoughts. Hide and seek does become a adult game. But the game is not fun anymore. A perfect ending for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Kajal Gulabani]

Thank yous !