Deserted Star

Deserted Star

A Poem by ~Kali~
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Because I often feel lonely and rejected.

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I feel so alone
I'm on a deserted star
I try to find a friend
I search near and far
I've been looking for days
Not a soul to be found
Maybe I'm just a girl
No one wants to be around
I don't know why I'm trying
But I still have some hope
I wish someone would find me
For now I'll have to cope
Nobody loves me
I know that's a fact
But now it's too late 
There's no going back
While others are on planets
I will lie here, scarred
Because I live in a lonely place
A little deserted star

© 2016 ~Kali~


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I know how it feels to feel rejected and lonely because I have been there.... You have captured the feelings here beautifully... There is a melancholic sadness in the poem that stands out for me.... It's a kind of feeling that makes you feel alone even in the midst of crowd...

It has a good rhyme scheme and pattern... I enjoyed it... I hope you get out such pain soon, if you ever need anyone to talk to feel free to leave a mail for me, I promise I will help you anyway I can... God bless you....
Sincerely,
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

~Kali~

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much! And yes, I feel lonely quite often, but I'm used to it I guess. I will if I ever .. read more
Inject Positivity

7 Years Ago

Take care, always remember "you can if you think you can"...
~Kali~

7 Years Ago

thanks, you too



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This has lyrical flow with solid rhyme, the content pours generously!

Always write about what you know, and remember that each has a season. Look forward to reading more of your work.

Rach x

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

~Kali~

7 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
I know how it feels to feel rejected and lonely because I have been there.... You have captured the feelings here beautifully... There is a melancholic sadness in the poem that stands out for me.... It's a kind of feeling that makes you feel alone even in the midst of crowd...

It has a good rhyme scheme and pattern... I enjoyed it... I hope you get out such pain soon, if you ever need anyone to talk to feel free to leave a mail for me, I promise I will help you anyway I can... God bless you....
Sincerely,
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

~Kali~

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much! And yes, I feel lonely quite often, but I'm used to it I guess. I will if I ever .. read more
Inject Positivity

7 Years Ago

Take care, always remember "you can if you think you can"...
~Kali~

7 Years Ago

thanks, you too

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Added on April 19, 2016
Last Updated on April 19, 2016
Tags: deserted, star, lonely, loneliness, sad, sadness, dark, teen, teen girl, girl

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~Kali~
~Kali~

George, IA



About
I'm a teen that likes to write dark poetry. Most of them will rhyme. Poetry is one of the only ways to get my feelings out! ^~^ more..

Writing
To Lizzie. To Lizzie.

A Poem by ~Kali~





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