Let's Go Back.. :)

Time passes away, things change, even if we don't want them to change!

I wish I could travel through the time,
when being with you was not a crime,
when I was free to make any move,
when statements were not required to be proved,

when care means to ping every now and then,
now things changed to: Don't disturb me dude, I'm talking to my girlfriend,
when we had no 'monetary' tension,
when a penny was enough to build a mansion,

I thought that we were playing together on the same frame,
but forgot the fact that there's always an opponent in every game,
I know, its a harsh time of this life,
but, if I think positive, its making me to strive,

I know, its of no use to live with the past,
but still I want to say:

Lets go back,
back to the beginning,
back to when we were together,
back to when everything was just perfect.. :)

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Brenden Moran]

You switched styles in the middle of the poem. It was a little disappointing. I'd consider revising this a little because readers most oftenly don't like that. It's distracting and gives the impression that you just gave up on the rhyme scheme half way through. I'd also consider reworking a few of your rhymes, they don't actually rhyme, and it throws off the reader. Some of your lines contain too many words and it disrupts the flow of the line, be careful of this and I'd consider revising this so that way you have smoothe lines throughout the entire poem. You have some good ideas and a good style. Good Job.

[sushi]

some wonderful days could never be bought back, need to live without them in memories and enjoy the present....

thanks for sharing... it was really a refreshing write...

Thnx

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Really lovely writing! I like whole wording.
Keep it up!
Do you read mine too "Anguish and She"
God bless you!
Lucky!Really lovely writing! I like whole wording.
Keep it up!
Do you read mine too "Anguish and She"
God bless you!
Lucky!

[Kalpit]

@Brenden: Thanks for the review! will try to implement your suggestions!

[Xicor]

Amazing Literal work here ! One of my favorites ! :)