A Remorseless Dancer

So far but yet so near....

Dancing on tip toes,

God feels so close.

Faster and faster,

A beat of a race horse.

Rhythm in full flow,

Heart in no remorse.

Higher and Higher,

Wings like an eagle.

Now I am a flier,

Heart full of heal.

Better and Better,

Love like no other.

A completed Identity,

Heart in all ability.

Further and further,

A journey at end.

Experience with our Father,

Heart in full content.

Thanking for forgiveness,

God is always in our souls.

Author's Note

Inspiration came while a was listening to a song. It felt as If everything was flowing through me..... please comment on my faults I would love to become a better poet!!!!

Reviews

[ROXANE DORSEY]

again thank you for this nice poem. i enjoyed reading it.

[Write Cat]

pleasure!! And thanks!!

[ThyFilthyNoob]

Nice Poem! The image is easy to picture in my mind.

[Write Cat]

I am glad you see it so!!!!

[Osé Dazo]

Wow! I can't believe you're just 12 yrs. old. :) You're such a talented kid. I love how you keep the pace and rhythm of your poem, as if my heart is also racing... dancing. :) You've got one catchy title there, too! Great piece. Keep writing, Katie! ^^, You can still improve .

[Write Cat]

Thanks soooo much. You don't know how much theses reviews help me!

[Osé Dazo]

You're welcome, Katie! ^^, God bless you!

[PandaPeaceful]

I like the structure and word choice you utilized in your poem. Good job!

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Nicely put together. Words flow up to high and down. So I am very happy about this. When you mentioned it's Russian song. I can imagine this song sing in book master and Margarita

[Anjali]

Hmm.... Good! I really liked it, I can't see any fault in it, as I'm just an amateur writer. But I really enjoyed it, the flow of the poem is just beautiful! I liked it, keep it up!

[Write Cat]

Thanks Anjali!!! I am glad you liked it!!

[Anjali]

No problem!

[Abraham George]

Dancing on tip toes,
God feels so close.

Faster and faster,
A beat of a race horse.
Rhythm in full flow,
Heart in no remorse.

Higher and Higher,
Wings like an eagle.
Now I am a flier,
Heart full of heal.

Better and Better,
Love like no other.
A completed Identity,
Heart in all ability.

Further and further,
A journey at end.
Experience with our Father,
Heart in full content.

Thanking for forgiveness,
God is always in our souls.

the rhythm you keep are so good.
also please share that song. let me hear it also

word selection are good and you drawn a picture of that dancer using your poetic words.

[Write Cat]

Actually it is a Russian song and its name is; Higher and Higher to the Blue Sky...I doubt you are going to find it though, because it is written in Russian as well. But you can try it through Google translate and then search it!!!! And thanks for your words!! It will really keep me going!!