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Title inspired by Harmlesslove. She's a great writer, check her out. Photo taken from sodahead.com. See description below.

He burned me without fire,

Slayed me with a kiss.

It's strange to feel a pulse,

When I know my heart is his.

I liked feeling like a queen,

But then I realized I was just a queen in your chessboard.

It's strange to feel a pulse,

When my heart was always ignored.

We've been playing too many games,

And I'm done competing.

It's strange to feel a pulse,

When I know my heart stopped beating.

Author's Note

Fictional poem. Inspired by a few songs.

Reviews

[David O Whalen (O Haol..]

I like all of your poetry Monster, especially when you use rhyme, but honestly the second line of the second verse needs to be shortened as it takes away all the rhythm of the balance of the poem. Use something like "Tho just a queen on your chessboard" or whatever it takes to get that line down to about six words. It'll flow better, trust me! Read it aloud several times and you'll see what I mean. It's great just as it is, and this is just my personal view on a great write. (don't hate me!)

[that-little-green-monster]

I don't hate you for expressing your views. I really appreciate your honest opinion and not just telling me what you think I want to hear. Only this way will I grow to become a better writer. Thank you so much.. I completely agree with you. The line does make it sound a bit off. I'll try to fix that. Thank you very much!

[Lily]

Hi remember me :)
you're still doing wonderful in your poems
I love this

[forevermore1218]

I really dig this one man. I feel as if you should get Amy Lee from Evanescence to sing it into a song like "call me when you're sober". I love the way you make your verses and your free writing style.

great job :)

[that-little-green-monster]

Thank you very much :)

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Nice ticking flow and lovely words. Beautifuly laced with emotion and pain, amazing!

[that-little-green-monster]

Thank you for the nice review

[None]

Great piece. I love the rhythm and then the long line. It's almost musical. You use pulse a few times, but I don't think it was redundant.

[that-little-green-monster]

Thank you :)

[Lydia]

Great poem! Flowed very well, also.

[Mockingbird]

sounds like you discovered you were only a drop in the bucket. it sucks to get hurt. great poem.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Ah a carcaphony of fierce elements.